L.O.V.E

Pay attention to the first letters ^^

Land on a patch of sand

Offer a well-drawn heart on the land

Void drawn into the earth’s crust

Evading the feeling that you must trust

 

Laugh as the sand tickles your fingers

Omens of beautiful imminent disasters

Vases of empty grains of sand

Exploring the dangers in your hand

 

Live and chase the sand away

Ordeals are now for you destined

Vitiate the sentiments led astray

Eventually drawing your first crescent

 

Learn the gravity of your actions

Oppress them before it’s too late.

Violate the controversy of your present

Effectively drawing the last crescent

 

Latent damage is drawing near

Osmotic destruction begins to appear

Violent quakes scare you on your behalf

Earth shakes and a crater break your heart in half

 

You drew your heart on a beach when you weren't sane

Inflated by the precious feeling that turned into pain

Never knew this curse will forever stay            

That day when you gave your heart away

 

 

Author's Note

Tell me what you think

Reviews

[conversations with her ..]

THIS.


you're something else!

I'm new on here, so it would be an honour if you could review some of my poems!

[N!LoC]

... this left me speechless... its that good

[GlacialStars]

Thanks you sir! That's nice to hear coming from you! And to know that it rendered you speechless leaves me with a feeling of ego-boostage xDv(not an actual word)

[scripted]

i think this was really good... nice job on this i can tell you put a lot of work into this

[GlacialStars]

Oh haha thank you and yeah it took a while but it was mostly very spontaneous the only trick was spelling love in every verse but afterwards it was just instinctive work.

[Neha]

This is wonderful!
You explained the feeling in beautifully dramatic manner. I specially liked the stanza:
"Laugh as the sand tickles your fingers
Omens of beautiful imminent disasters
Vases of empty grains of sand
Exploring the dangers in your hand"

Keep it up. :)

[GlacialStars]

Ah thank you very much for your review

[Alejandra]

Very nice. I really love your imagery. My favorite line is Earth shakes and a crater breaks your heart in half.
This poem is awesome. Please keep writing. :)

[GlacialStars]

xD thank you so very much! Did you notice that every stanza spelled love? It was really hard to do it but I got it done XD

[Alejandra]

Yes I did notice that. I can imagine it took lots of time. :) But great job!