Once was a man

This is a painful poem that I had to write. The only way to get out the hurt and the pain for me is to make it into something else. So I turn my pain and hurt into poetry.

Once was a man

There once was a man that stole my life

He did it without ever using a knife

That monster stole my innocence from me

Stifling who I was meant to be

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For years it hid in the back of my mind

I was always looking but could never find

What I needed to succeed

Forget about his evil deed

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Years it haunted my every dream

So much heart ache I wanted to scream

But all I did was hold it in

I wear my mask with my grin

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When all of that got too much

I turned to drugs, booze and such

But it never helped my pain

All it did was fry my brain

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Finally I sat down and started to write

I let go of the hate and all of the fight

I put the past where it needed to be

Now I can live my life and be free

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Invisible Ink]

Great job putting these feelings into words and sharing them makes it all the more healing! I felt the same and starting writing as well, it does help tremendously, but it didn't take it all away, it still comes back... many years later. Not hiding anymore, like it is our fault, is a very big step! BRAVO! You are a brave soul and I applaud you!

[Liva Mary]

Like how it rhymes. Very nicely written too.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your great winning poem!

[Phibby Venable]

very honest and strong..

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

I think you should really listen to some of the Youtube poets that have posted their stuff - I find it works wonder for me, and even inspires me (if you like spoken word/slam that is). I started to write poetry for release, and only recently did it begin to turn for those subjects and into pieces that focused on more than me. What you have done is simple, so it relates to so many people, which is what poetry should do. well done

[CrimsonMisery]

i like this :) i'm not yyet at the stage of giving up my addictions, but almost...

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is really very thoughtful and deep, short yet so strong..
Something with which I guess most of us can relate ourselves to...
Great work :)

[feline_fairy]

I like the way you don't use punctuation in this - it's all one big sentance. It gives it a fast rythem and I found myself reading faster and faster as I got to the end and this really enhanced the feeling of anger and panic that I got out of the poem. I think this was really well crafted, and when you add to this the strong imagery within the language you used - monster, stifling, heart ache you really get some powerful images. I really do geniuinely like this poem, and think that you have done really well. Not sure if I've read any of your other poems, but I really want to now. There are not many people who can pull of what you've done here, but you seem to have done it effortlessly - there is no awkwardness in this poem at all - it really sounds as though it just dripped off your tongue, and the words flowed so freely. You know when you have so much in your head you want to write down that you can't seem to write fast enough - that is the impression I get with this too - again because of the use of no punction to make you speed up as you read it.

Congratulations.

[Jinx's Heart]

I guess I love your poetry because I feel I can relate to it so well. Another beautifully expressed poem. Your words are so genuine and you express it very well. Wonderful work.