ASHES IN THE AIR

ASHES IN THE AIR

A Poem by DIVYA

When its about you and me

Its not about the heat of passion

Its about burning alone in bliss

When its about you and me

its not going to be easy

The wind will ridicule us

fanning the sea of flames between us

fueled by fears and doubts

When its about you and me

its about the pain of silence

Its about pacing tight-lipped

on red hot, hissing coals

losing the skin of your soles

Its about ashes in the air

Strewn on conflagrations of dreams

When its about you and me

Its about oft-burnt, blistered hearts  

Seared lashes upon scalded eyes

blinded by sulphur and smoke

Yet move you must, blinking

faltering, slowly towards me

 


© 2018 DIVYA


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DIVYA
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A very deep poem.....

This one sure hits a few chords in this sensitive heart; for reasons relatable and others not completely understood. Relations between two people are never easy. Males and females are wired differently and as such react in different ways. One person's burning alone in bliss is another's pain of silence. When fanned by doubt and fear, it is natural that the concoction will not be an easy mix. Sometimes there is indeed one who will walk through these flames of doubt and fear, faltering, struggling, yet always moving onwards in pursuit of the other. For they know that the flames may burn them , cinder them into ashes, yet the sacrifice is worth the effort. Such a union shall then always remain strong and overcome anything. Fear, doubt, flames.....they are all blown away by the clarity of a calming wind.

Some wonderful metaphors used throughout, consistently and always on point. The hallmark of a gifted poet. If there needs to be ashes in the air, then so be it. Some people are just drawn to flames and will walk through the fire to attain their dream. For the dream is always worth it.

A wonderful poem. Deeply thoughtful, metaphorical and laced in realism.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much, my dear Doodley. When the words are for you, when the words are yours, make of .. read more
Doodley

1 Year Ago

Words are for me, huh? Aren't I lucky then! Always welcome. Much love. 🌷
DIVYA

1 Year Ago

Believe...... 😼!



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This is a terrific piece of writing and the hints of an eternal love is so very obvious or so I felt. I don't know about you but you're love of life is a lucky guy. Its a blessing to have someone who can understand love so well. Stay blessed. This was wonderful

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

1 Year Ago

Thank you Abhishek. You’re so kind.
Now that is hot.. physically, emotionally, spiritually and psychologically... simmer for half another few minutes, serve and enjoy..... N

Posted 1 Year Ago


Neville

1 Year Ago

I would give an awful lot for ten degrees write now... tis still minus something... hotch up a bit a.. read more
DIVYA

1 Year Ago

Lol. Okay. Shows we should count our blessings.
And you keep the heating up, N and get somet.. read more
Neville

1 Year Ago

you bet'cha...
Raw and honest poetry, this one. Moving closer is never easy, but you expressed the hard work that that journey often is.

Inspirational.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much SleeplessVolcano 💕
just from the thought of being together puts me into a bliss,not just the act of love but the thinking about it

Posted 1 Year Ago


DIVYA

1 Year Ago

Hello Ron!
Merry Christmas & A Very Happy New Year To You!

Indeed, just the .. read more
 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you divia,and te same sentiments to you as well
Gosh, Divya!
Never, I think, have I experienced the awe and pleasure of reading such a monumentally precious love poem.
You've filled so many cups to the brim of overflowing with human feelings, emotions, hopes, dreams, heart and soul captivating promise, all contained in this metaphoric composition of purest burgeoning bliss between two beings ⁓ both, who've been kissed and set afire by the flames of infinite romance, to ever rise like two phoenixes entwined in the throes of love's glorious, eternal passions.

Simply gorgeous poetry, Dear Divya; this is my favorite of all your splendid pieces, not particularly for its masterfully-skilled touches that thrill me through and through, but for the depths of honesty and sincerity it radiates out from your own amazing heart and soul, into your every reader's.

Thank you for sharing this enthralling work, Divya … may the gods above bless you and your wondrous love! ⁓ Richard

PS:
Picture and music choices are sheer perfection*

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Lady Divya Dear,
Your words here, and in sharing our poetry and reviews in particular, have b.. read more
DIVYA

1 Year Ago

You’re very treasured too dear Richard. Happy New Year Hugs. 🤗 Wishing you all good things!
Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago


🔅⁓⁓⁓⁓ 🍃🌟🍃⁓⁓⁓⁓🔅
Ps.. such beautiful, entrancing music, perfect for this splendid emotion filled write 💑

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

1 Year Ago

Thanks a million Tom! It means a lot and I’m very happy you found this poem 💕
A love so deep, meaningful, way beyond physical passion and desire, no mortal man can divide nor pull asunder, despite their jealousy and poisoned attempts, destiny shall prevail! ❤️

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

1 Year Ago

Thank you my dear friend. You’re missed always. I hope to be in touch more in the coming year! �.. read more
His is wayyyyyy more than just love. This is a connection far greater than any. An undying loyalty. I like that about this poem. Its a honorable quest of a person fighting through hell for a loved one. Is there any more honor than that? Well written and flows perfectly. The message is just wonderful! I really love this piece!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

1 Year Ago

Thank you my dear Sarah. I miss you a lot. Life keeps pulling me away from the Café. I’ll come ba.. read more
Sarah_Allen

1 Year Ago

Aw youre sweet, thats understandable about not being on WC- life is important. Ill look forwatd to s.. read more
Such deep contemplation, of self evaluation of the moth to the flame

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

1 Year Ago

Of course! I love to write and all my dreams are connected to that. I do realise that in the end it�.. read more
Cherrie Palmer

1 Year Ago

It is great to connect with other craftsmen. I have enjoyed meeting you as well.
DIVYA

1 Year Ago

I really appreciate thinking of me in those terms. Indeed craftsmen we are!
I missed this one Divya and have Mr E to thank for giving me direction. When I read your lines I was reminded very much about separation and loving. It reminded me of the early months after meeting a love of mine where we were far apart and the telephone became our life line. Your metaphors are excellent and I have to say you brought many of those feelings back to me which I experienced, many of them uncomfortable to live with and often painful. That is a sign of first class poetry.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

1 Year Ago

Ohhh....thank you so Chris. No poem of mine feels complete to me here without your feedback, my frie.. read more

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