Three

Food for thought

Pride, Awe and Humility

Each alike with their counterparts

 

Who is one to say when it is right?

to boast,

to flourish 

in pride

 

What man can achieve

A Triumph!

Parades through the streets

Fanfares in the avenues

 

Oh the extravaganza!

The Arrogance of man

Memento mori

 

When does awe become envy?

 

There is a fine line

A shadow of a difference

Hewn into the cuts of that jeweler's gem

The ability to marvel at the world, without becoming jaded.

Beauty

 

A statue in a plaza

In Hispania it cheers

A man who did so much more

With much fewer years

 

Oh the avarice!

The spark in the eye

Memento mori

 

 

Born from humility,

a virtue for another age

 

Oft is it mistake for submission

Reticence

A lack of assertion

To wear a crown without grace

The naivety

Lessons to be learned

Treachery to be had

 

Oh the betrayal!

A loss most brutal

Memento mori

 

They shape the stone

Create the sculpture

A thing of beauty

A thing of art

 

Yet they can crack the core

Shatter the foundation

A contemptuous expression

A pretentious look

 

Alike with their counterparts

Interlinked,

Intertwined,

Pride, Awe, and Humility

Author's Note

For some reason I've taken a kind of personal liking of this poem. I find that every time I return to it, it still gives that same feeling as when I first wrote it.

Reviews

[Grey Evanescent]

"They shape the stone
Create the sculpture
A thing of beauty
A thing of art

Yet they can crack the core
Shatter the foundation
A contemptuous expression
A pretentious look"

I love these lines. Very poetic in a way that it can still convey the thought. Somehow the three are different but alike.
Beautiful piece. Keep up!

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Wow such poetic fantastic questions you ask and muse here. Yeah pride is ok sometimes. And awe could turn into envy yeah. Enjoyed your great poem here. Kudos.



I'm a newbie here, pls read my poems but pleez review/comment only my 2nd , my newest poem here, wud luv to know your thoughts, Always nice to meet poem pals. And I like to know if my poem is easily understood as intended.

[poetgurl]

They shape the stone
Create the sculpture
A thing of beauty
A thing of art

Love this part, this is really good and descriptive.

[emmajoy]

'When does awe become envy? ~ There is a fine line ~ A shadow of a difference ~ Hewn into the cuts of that jeweler's gem ~ The ability to marvel at the world .. .. '

You gently glide, then romp, through increasingly avid thoughts.. caught in your own momentum in a way. Your phrasing seesaws then settles which actually stirs this reader's mind and perhaps feeling that is what draws you back- forth to your acutely aware poem. Memento mori, indeed.

[Olivia Clune]

I can see why you're drawn to this poem of yours...I felt the power when reading it. There is such humanity in this poem, it raises so many questions about mortality, humility, envy etc. Great work!

[Threads]

In a sense it's a reminder to myself to never be too ambitious, but to keep from being idle.
Thanks a heap for the feedback though, I appreciate it.