Dark Secrets

I need someone to save me
From my own incapability’s
I want to shine
The way my smile does
I write to show the world
What I can’t always say
Even thou my own words
Crucify me in so many ways
So much you all don’t know
So much pain my glistening eyes shadow over
There were days id walk in the rain
And cry my soul out
Knowing I could possibly never be the same
Time has passed
And there are days
When there are so many around
But just wanting to have the rain for a day
Breathing sometimes just doesn’t want to be an option
And my vision is sometimes just blurred by unresolved fears
As quickly as I can run
I quickly stop and pull back
Don’t want to trip and fall
And scrape the last shred of what I have left
But my tears escape me
And show the weakness I feel
And not the strength people think I show
I break down in the dark
And that is when the real me comes on through
When will you all know this me?
That I keep hidden deep inside
I couldn’t even tell you when
Never mind on how

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime realizing we need support is a good first step. Everyone need someone to assist in a life. Your poem told a story of the desire to break the wall of fear. Life is very simple. If we don't try to do anything. We won't know our limits and strengths. The best of people have fear and desire to find their place. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Shadow Writer]

We all have dark secrets, already I can relate to these words. Good writing. ty SW

[Dream Weaver]

What a beautiful write. I have only one critique'...
Break this down into stanzas, The words are
bunched together, it takes a way from the flow
and fluidity of your poem. This would make it
much easier for the reader to follow and would
make this strong poem even stronger. But still
a Solid poem ;)

[searchingpoet]

I could really feel this..great write!

[Leah Everett]

i have felt exactly like this at times, but i strongly agree with Coyote that when you realise that support is the biggest step to make, then your well on your way to recovery. i loved this poem, it has alot of emotion soaked inside it. well done x