Closing Time

War, that time has come

A man from every door

Closing time is near

There’s trouble everywhere

She Hugs and says goodbye

Never seen him cry

They swear they’ll always be

In this life and the next

He puts on the Green Uniform

A cap and black boots

The Russians are coming the English are coming

He shoots, his brothers in arms too

Friendly fire, deadly fire, they die, they burn

A bullet catches one knee: a mine takes the other

He bleeds. he limps, he cries

He looks at the skies and says a prayer

“Dear Lord please keep Lisa safe”

As the earth fades out, keep mama safe: he whispers

He kept a promise he made his mother

She said: Remember to pray when closing time is near

He fades gently into oblivion

Lisa has no one

Shadows, Spirits, weeping

She bears him a Son

 

 

Author's Note

In My Opinion, Soldiers are the Bravest People on earth..

Reviews

[Circe]

whoa... speechless, so heavy and so much death... how we make life into wars and send men to face such horror, because they are men and they are brave and they can sacrifice their lives for us... I don't think it's a fair expectation.. I think there is too much manipulation, propaganda in creating these expectations and traditions.. yes men fight for food for survival, but we are creating these situations of extreme conflict that is unnecessary... then I think it's unnecessary to sacrifice so many lives.

[Tomi]

Thank you! i couldn't agree more

[Coyote Poetry]

War leave no winners. Only people with sadness. Your story in the poem is common for many places in our world today. People died to protect home and family. I pray your friend does okay. Hard to raise children alone. Thank you for sharing the sad poem.
Coyote

[Tomi]

thank you for your kind review! not exactly a true story..it's an inspired piece..So many men have selflessly fought for and given up their lives for many.. A tribute to all those men: Dead and Alive

[Leslie Philibert]

Good poem with a strong story - I admire soldiers as persons, but would be happy
to see a world without war and conflicts.

[Tomi]

me too leslie, me too! the world would be a better place without war and conflict

[kingblaq]

Friendly fire, deadly fire, they die, they burn

A bullet catches one knee: a mine takes the other

He bleeds. he limps, he cries

He looks at the skies and says a prayer

“Dear Lord please keep Lisa safe”

Wow. deep is all i can say

[Tomi]

thanks bro

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Having a brother currently in the war, they certainly are. For reasons, I dont think I'll ever understand. A profound, well written write. Nicely done.

[Tomi]

Thank you foe your review...your Brother is definitely a Hero! I hope he comes back home safe

[Poppie Mira]

Well written.

[Tomi]

Thnak you :)

[metapendrius]

Brave and commited

[emmy bon]

so true, the soldiers are the bravest, my uncle gone in this manner. nice writing

[Tomi]

May He rest in Peace:Your Uncle...Thank you for reviewing this

[Dr. Wood ?]

you seem to have said it all here..and said it very eloquently....Bravery comes in many forms....But to face death knowingly takes a special resolve

[Tomi]

Thank you for reviewing!