The effect of today’s sins

The effect of today’s sins

A Poem by Tomoe Tellez
"

This is a poem I wrote for a villain of my novel "The written forgotten".

"

In the world of the living

Demons cannot win

In this heart full of hate

Love has arrived too late

For in my head rules the rage

That is caused by this new age

© 2015 Tomoe Tellez


Author's Note

Tomoe Tellez
What do you think of after reading this poem?

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

Hello Alondra, I have read somewhere that the best way to
Enhance your characters, are to write something About
them outside of the story. I've done it as well, I believe
It works. You've done it very well in this piece, very cool.
Thanks for the send'

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomoe Tellez

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much for reading it! :D This isn't the only piece I've done, I hope to upload more in.. read more



Reviews

Honest and true words my poet friend.
"For in my head rules the rage
That is caused by this new age"
In a world control by hate, war and separation. New age seem very scary. Thank you for sharing the powerful words.
Coyote




Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomoe Tellez

4 Years Ago

Thanks a lot to you for reading this! I'm glad you think this way.
Coyote Poetry

4 Years Ago

I do and you are welcome.
Traffic jams, and not being able to breath clean air.

Insight.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomoe Tellez

4 Years Ago

Wow! That's a different perspective than what I thought I would receive as an answer and actually it.. read more
Insight

4 Years Ago

You are very welcome.
I think of waking up, and knowing I'm still living in the same old, cruel, bloody, hateful world i was born in. and who are all those who go against the injustice? well, outcasts. like me.

anyway, found a song that would go with this piece here's the link : https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=SBjQ9tuuTJQ&itct=CBkQpDAYBCITCPah-KziiskCFVacHAodd5wIxDIHcmVsYXRlZEifrI7V5ojx39MB&client=mv-google&gl=RS&hl=hu

100 points my friend, no doubts about it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomoe Tellez

4 Years Ago

I heard the song, it was amazing, thanks for sharing. And thanks a lot for the review, it means a lo.. read more
Dani The Unreviewed

4 Years Ago

You are always welcome :D
I can picture this as being used as a voiceover to describe an upcoming show on TV, or a DVD trailer, with some husky voices "Candymanesque" type dude doing the talking. I like the rage of the new age, it is left open for the readers own critique of what enrages them about modern living. (where do I start? technology replacing humans in the workplace, everything made to break and be replaced, Oh I haven't had enough coffee yet, but the list is endless)
I also like the red for demons, hate and rage, and the blue for living, love and new age. It depicts the mind as seeing these words as cold, which might explain the rage within.
Superbly done Sally. Me likey.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

alifeacoustic

4 Years Ago

Oops, sorry Alondra. I just realised that this was a read request sent by Sally and not written by h.. read more
Tomoe Tellez

4 Years Ago

Ja, ja, ja, XD! Don't worry, and thanks a lot for your words, they really made me smile in a giddy w.. read more
alifeacoustic

4 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
Firstly, I love the fact that you wrote 'LOVE" in blue, in place of the traditional red. You used red for "rage", "demons", "hate", instead. That's what I call unique, right there. And, as for the poem, I simply love it; all of it. Case closed.
PS: After reading this, I immediately thought of Damon Salvatore - a character from the television series "The Vampire Diaries".

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomoe Tellez

4 Years Ago

Thank you! :D I generally don't like it that both rage and love are represented with the same color,.. read more

2
next Next Page
last Last Page
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

712 Views
15 Reviews
Rating
Shelved in 1 Library
Added on November 12, 2015
Last Updated on November 12, 2015
Tags: demons, rage, hate, world

Author

Tomoe Tellez
Tomoe Tellez

About
I am a since I learned how to write. No kidding, my mother has home videos where I´m talking about the stories I use to write for my little brothers at the age of seven. I’ve always writt.. more..

Writing

Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


The Preacher Man The Preacher Man

A Poem by Gee


The Monster The Monster

A Poem by Not here


Paradise in Paris Paradise in Paris

A Poem by B