It happened

It happened

A Poem by Tony Jordan
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The day she said 'it's over'...

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When my life paused
when my blood froze
when the dam in my eyes burst
when the world reverted into a frightening place
when                          re-filled the void
when I lowered my head again
when I felt so lonely
when you said goodbye

© 2017 Tony Jordan


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There is nothing like that emptiness when you lose someone, whether its from a love union that's run its course, or a loved one passing...it's so hard to let go and face each day knowing their life force will not be a part of your world anymore. Your words are simple, but poignant. They touch the heart like an uber sharp pin, pricking just enough to draw that glistening drop of blood. Well penned, my friend.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

4 Years Ago

I invest it all Pam. I'm the guy at the roulette wheel or at the craps table shoving all the chips o.. read more



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I'm glad this is the first poem I read. This captures something quite visceral about this exact event. It feels as though so much should be said, yet, only a small number of words is not only necessary, but demanded, to communicate the powerful emotion. Nicely written.

Posted 4 Years Ago


one is never ready for the bitter pill esp if blindsided, its unfortunate we have to take this medicine in order to move on. hang in there chum.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Not sure why I don't see you posting Tone, but this is such a heartfelt piece I only came upon on my live stream. Stark, sad and full of regret.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Awww Tony. :( I feel you! This is really well written. xx Keep your head up mate.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

4 Years Ago

Thanks Kat.
(hugs)
It is best that dark day is quickly forgotten; sadly, no such form of blessed amnesia seems likely to occur.
Unless she eventually decides to say "hello," again, the poet is forced to somehow live with her goodbye.
Bitter pill, Tony.



Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

4 Years Ago

the bitterest pill I've had to swallow Jimmy.
Thanks for you understanding words.
I think we have all felt something like this at some point in our lives....it sux...expressed perfectly :) x

Posted 4 Years Ago


Awe... my heart melted at this Tony! Why, such a great, sad poem you've written.
Keep it up!

Posted 4 Years Ago


brutally painful. i could feel the hurt in this. like the void in the middle - good effect. frighteningly realistic. well written with great imagery Tony.

Posted 4 Years Ago


The lines are like sharp daggers being thrown one after another keeping the reader focused at all times. Attention grabbing stuff. Nice job

Posted 4 Years Ago


I pray the sadness only lasted as long as this poem. Such a picture you did paint of grief and despair.. thank you for sharing,,write on..

Posted 4 Years Ago



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Added on February 13, 2017
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Tags: love, breakup, heartbreak, devastated

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Tony Jordan

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Just writing to get it out My avatar is an actual slice of an onion that I cut up and I kept and froze - it reminds me of the saying - If you don't laugh, you cry. more..

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