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I Sense Something

I Sense Something

A Poem by Revolutionary

I couldn't feel it
when you split my vision
and made me see things that never were.
I couldn't smell it
when you filled the room
with the aroma of stifeling words
I couldn't taste it
when you left hatred on my tongue
and I could not spit it out.
I couldn't hear it
when the silence left by you
was screaming at me loud
I couldn't stop it
from becoming the last sense
I knew as truly you.
I couldn't feel it
touching me with love
that we never knew
But I could see it
Blinding both of us
into a false sense of love.
Yes I could see it!
Can You?

© 2012 Revolutionary


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I thank him through whom I stopped by to read this. I read and reread it several times to get a clear view.what I could conceive was that of a person blinded to deceit, through a cover cleverly woven . and at last you are able to see through it all.however poetry is all about keeping it under wraps and you did it wonderfully!bravo!

Posted 7 Years Ago


nice way to come in the backdoor, you point builds slowly and it isnt to the last line that it is revealed.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Good to read your words again. I like the desire and the directness of this poem. Sometime being kind doesn't work.
"Yes I could see it!
Can You?"
Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Revolutionary
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hale, MI



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