Revenge

Revenge, a blood filled rose

Each day this deadly flower blooms, getting fed by the sorrowful hose

The hose being the word, and the water the blows

But each day the garden, with flowers grows

The flowers are outside of the gate, being fed by the river

With each new day, the gate began to shiver

Eventually the gate broke, and the rose with its thorns

The river, this flower it adorns

The flower grew, its beauty caused the water in the hose to brew

The hose shot, more than ever, but the flower it did not sever

Instead, the hose itself began to dissever

The hose disappeared for ever and ever

All because the rose never took revenge 

Itself it did not need to avenge

For its love fixed everything

Revengeance did not get a chance to sting.

Author's Note

Please tell me If I can fix anything.

Reviews

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

This is really a well descriptive poem.
It simply talks to me in a way that capture my mind.
Vengeance is like an inferno that really burn outrageously. Either in quietness or furiosity, It has the tendency of destroying anything that stand on its way. Only a powerful, simple and forgiving mind can quench its power and subdue its anger.
Another point is that, It makes the matter worst. If we can be like that rose that forgive, then we shall also blossom and there would be peace in the world.

Thank you for sharing this, Fairytale.
This is Great!

[Fairytale]

Thank you, I thought was really beginner since this is my 7th poem ever.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Beginners become professionals if they don't stop practicing and improving themselves.
I also learning more everyday that I might be able to express myself well in a new and better way.

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

WOW! very descriptive and so well written, I enjoyed this write.

[barleygirl]

As a writer with heavy rhyming, I enjoyed your rhyming wordplay. I felt that you were making some attempts to also write with rhythm, but this effort wasn't very effective becuz your line lengths are short & long, rather than more even in length. This is not a requirement. Lots of people convey strong rhythmic writing in varied line lengths. But in this poem, it feels like sometimes you get going & can't give up a few words in a line for the sake of maintaining rhythm. Example: "The flowers are outside of the gate" . . . I would do this line this way: "Flowers outside the gate" . . . there's no need to clog up the line with all those extra meaningless words. That's just my style. There's nothing wrong with your style. It's conversational. You write like many people would say it. I just mentioned the rhythm thing becuz it looked to me like you were attempting to develop your rhyme & rhythm. All in all, you have something to say & you say it well! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Laura Kate]

This is really eloquently written. I enjoyed the story, it had the feel or a fairytale with lovely imagery.

[Onlyme]

Exquisite storytelling of love gone sour and revenge is the final outcome.

[Fairytale]

Thank you very much

[Cherrie Palmer]

I like the rotten apple theme remastered.
A lovely poem, nicely done.

[Fairytale]

Thank you, truly.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Poetry is such a powerful canvas. You have excellent instincts.

[John the Baptist]

Nice tale showing the superiority of love to revenge. Tell me, though, is there such a word as "revengeance?"

[Fairytale]

Yes, as long as it makes sense and is expressed by writing or speaking then it is a word