Six Long Years

Love under pressure.

We would smile and laugh,
Find life without a path,
There's no destination in mind,
You are mine.
Bestfriend at first glance,
then I gave you a chance,
There wasn't disapointed or hell,
we're doing well.

A kiss and a grin,
you took me by the chin,
Whispered in my ear,
That youd always be here.
And you were.
Even when I wished you weren't.

We've fought through our wars,
Some maybe more,
At our own front doors,
Even at each other's throats,
We were one.

Even though it hurt,
Still here we are,
and we wear our scars.

Can you see the shooting star?
That's where we always are,
In a far off place,
Part of some distant race,
In a forgotten world,
So bazar.

It's been six years,
Through blood, sweat, and tears,
Still beating the odds.

Here we are.
Here we stand,
Not bent by demand,
Hand in hand,
In this broken land.

Reviews

[Andrew Dane Parker]

Thank you for reading and reviewing the first chapter of my story (more to come)! I appreciate your opinion, but you also helped me stumble upon your very wonderful writing! This poem is something I can relate to in many ways (even though I've never had a relationship last six year or even close to that). But anyway, I really enjoyed this. Keep at it!

[Beth Shade]

Thanks so much^^ I appreciate it big time!

[Sami Khalil]

"Here we are.
Here we stand,
Not bent by demand,
Hand in hand,
In this broken land."
A good poem and rhyming message. Bravo......................

[Beth Shade]

Thanks so much^^ this is a very dear piece to me and I'm so glad you enjoy it.

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:)......

[ZDMusgrove]

It is a lovely poem. If you corrected the grammar this poem would surely radiate a brilliance like no other. Keep up the good work and remember to proofread your work.

[Beth Shade]

Can you tell me where I need to correct what? Please?

[ZDMusgrove]

We would smile and laugh;
Find life without a path.
There's no destination in mind.
read moreWe would smile and laugh;
Find life without a path.
There's no destination in mind.
You are mine.
Best friend at first glance
Then I gave you a chance,
There wasn't disappointment or hell.
We were doing well.

A kiss and a grin,
You took me by the chin,
Whispered in my ear,
"That youd always be here,"
And you were.
Even when I wished you weren't.

We've fought through our wars,
Some maybe more,
At our own front doors,
Even at each other's throats.
We were one.

Even though it hurt,
Still, here we are,
And we wear our scars.

Can you see the shooting star?
That's where we always are.
In a far off place,
Part of some distant race,
In a forgotten world,
So bizarre.

It's been six years,
Through blood, sweat, and tears,
Still beating the odds.
Here we are.
Here we stand,
Not bent by demand,
Hand in hand,
In this broken land.

I took the time to revise, because it easier to write it with proper corrections than to make a list of the problems.

[Beth Shade]

Okay thank you

[ZDMusgrove]

It is no problem, and your welcome.