A Poem by CrashDavis47

Oh sleep how i tire of your elusive ways,

we play your cat and mouse game as night turns into day.

Oh sleep how bitter sweet you are, 

 whenever i find you  dawn is never far.

© 2010 CrashDavis47

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i like this one, gives the reader a peaceful feeling at the beginning and a feeling of curiousity at the end

Posted 10 Years Ago

Short, sweet, a complete idea in a concise package.
I wrote on the same topic, title: "Insomnia" check it out.

Posted 10 Years Ago

Excellent job! It makes me think of people who can't sleep and enjoy it when sleep happens!

Posted 10 Years Ago

great(: i like the subject you used. its not something that you ready about everyday. again, like the last poem of yours, i think you could make it a little longer. but maybe thats just my oppinion?

all in all, pretty good

Posted 10 Years Ago

Insomniacs Uni...zzz..zzz..zz
This was good! Short and sweet and didn't actually make me fall asleep (I was kidding). I have one with the same title you should earlier work.

Creative minds are often kept up at late hours! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago

Id say ignore or erase the first comment! This is so awesome! Great job!

Posted 10 Years Ago

Very true. I find my self fighting sleep all the time, but if I nap then the day as passed!

Posted 10 Years Ago

Put more effort in your genius talent youy f*g.

Posted 10 Years Ago

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Added on October 25, 2010
Last Updated on October 25, 2010



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Im an aspiring author, what i want to do in life is write novels. Im trying to take a serious go at this so please comment and critique my writing. anything to help me be a better writer is welcome more..


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