A Poem by CrashDavis47

Oh sleep how i tire of your elusive ways,

we play your cat and mouse game as night turns into day.

Oh sleep how bitter sweet you are, 

 whenever i find you  dawn is never far.

© 2010 CrashDavis47

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i like this one, gives the reader a peaceful feeling at the beginning and a feeling of curiousity at the end

Posted 9 Years Ago

Short, sweet, a complete idea in a concise package.
I wrote on the same topic, title: "Insomnia" check it out.

Posted 9 Years Ago

Excellent job! It makes me think of people who can't sleep and enjoy it when sleep happens!

Posted 9 Years Ago

great(: i like the subject you used. its not something that you ready about everyday. again, like the last poem of yours, i think you could make it a little longer. but maybe thats just my oppinion?

all in all, pretty good

Posted 9 Years Ago

Insomniacs Uni...zzz..zzz..zz
This was good! Short and sweet and didn't actually make me fall asleep (I was kidding). I have one with the same title you should earlier work.

Creative minds are often kept up at late hours! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago

Id say ignore or erase the first comment! This is so awesome! Great job!

Posted 9 Years Ago

Very true. I find my self fighting sleep all the time, but if I nap then the day as passed!

Posted 9 Years Ago

Put more effort in your genius talent youy f*g.

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Added on October 25, 2010
Last Updated on October 25, 2010



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Im an aspiring author, what i want to do in life is write novels. Im trying to take a serious go at this so please comment and critique my writing. anything to help me be a better writer is welcome more..


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