A verse for an apple tree

A verse for an apple tree

A Poem by TwoDaysTooLate
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A little work to show how much the little things mean in life.

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Outsiders come in.
Insiders come out. 
Three languages,
One spoken by 20
Two spoken by 100
      Apples.
Bring the out out of outsiders
Bring the in into insiders
    and pull together
Two communities
Put the friend into
a sinking ship
To create a floating friend-ship

© 2016 TwoDaysTooLate


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TwoDaysTooLate
Honest reviews please :) x

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I really like the rhythm that you introduce in the first two lines. I also appreciate the interjection of "Apples" in line 5, adding a hiccup to the flow of the piece. Kind of like in a symphony where the music builds to a tension and then stops suddenly, giving you a moment to think about what just happened. The grand idea of bringing two peoples together is marvelous, and I love it.
Hopefully this helps, as I have not improved my skills in poetry in the last year haha

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TwoDaysTooLate

5 Years Ago

Haha thank you so much ^-^ I love your music comparison xD you certainly have improved in analysis t.. read more
NightWatch

5 Years Ago

Glad I could be of assistance! And thank you! :)


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I really like the rhythm that you introduce in the first two lines. I also appreciate the interjection of "Apples" in line 5, adding a hiccup to the flow of the piece. Kind of like in a symphony where the music builds to a tension and then stops suddenly, giving you a moment to think about what just happened. The grand idea of bringing two peoples together is marvelous, and I love it.
Hopefully this helps, as I have not improved my skills in poetry in the last year haha

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TwoDaysTooLate

5 Years Ago

Haha thank you so much ^-^ I love your music comparison xD you certainly have improved in analysis t.. read more
NightWatch

5 Years Ago

Glad I could be of assistance! And thank you! :)

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TwoDaysTooLate
TwoDaysTooLate

Crimson Peak, Rain Streaked Glass, United Kingdom



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