Life

One of the first poems I've ever written

Dear Life

F**k you, you piss me off, you set my blood aflame with useless rage, I ask for a break, how long do I gotta wait? My patience is wearing thin and I no longer need to anticipate the sorrow because I always know it's gonna follow. One more false step is only pushin me closer to the edge, if you were worth dying for I'd end up on the floor beneath that ledge, but the means don't justify the ends, so I'll keep living it until the point of no return arrives, the point is only getting closer, but you can't see that through your benevolent lies of love and happiness. The closer I get the more I feel like cutting it short,if only to end this unneeded submission to ignorance and self-loathing

With hate

Author's Note

Wasn't sure how to lay this out, so I just typed it out

Reviews

[Robert]

its an excellent go at a style brought forth from the beat poets, mainly jack kerouak (not spelled correctly) they would run with an emotion and write as the words pop in their head. Mainly i believe it was the drugs but haha uv done very well here, illb e excited to see some more classic style however. thats where a poet shines

btw thank you so much for your extreamly nice reveiws of my poetry, much appreciated, and welcome

[Ang]

I have a writing similar to this. But...unlike you, I'm not brave enough to put it up on this site. I really like this piece! It definitely showed me that maybe everyone goes through this phase of life where they just don't like life. Good thing is, well for me at least, I have learned that life goes on and life isn't so bad :) And don't worry about the layout. It's not the typical layout for a poem but it fits the writing. Great piece here!

[Cheavel DeLuna]

even with it's being layed out the way it is, it held me till the very end. i can really tell how much amotion their is behind this poem, its good, i really like it. =]