Which one?

Which one?

A Poem by Ryan Falzon - Tymon
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A poem about the difficult decisions in life, mostly me practicing my rhyming.

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This is the reason why,

I am just one guy,

walking in this only path

not knowing where I'm at.

 

I follow blindly to my fate,

and I think I'm late,

But where is it taking me?

where am I to be?

 

But the path splits

into two different ends,

I usually go with the flow

but I'm not sure which one I should follow.

 

As I pick the one to the right,

I keep following all night,

until the path splits again

and this time it's into ten.

 

There are a million choices we could take,

we have to think and focus on each step we make,

for they're can always be a mistake,

which can lead down to the bottom of the lake.

 

But which one will I choose,

How will I pick the one right for me?

I fear that whatever I pick, I will lose,

and I will never be free.

© 2010 Ryan Falzon - Tymon


Author's Note

Ryan Falzon - Tymon
Mostly practicing rhyming, and the concept as well :)

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I really like the poem itself. It makes you think. You never know which choice to take and there are millions of them.

As far as the rhyming, I cant depict a set scheme (like aabb or abab). But the words you picked were good except that in the last stanza you rhymed "me" with "me". I might pick a different word for one of those.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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The concept of this poem is very nice and an interesting thing to work with; however, the execution of this concept is pretty much overdone. This poem doesn't really set it apart from the other "many roads and choices" poem there are, and I'd really like you to find something that could give the piece the impact it needs. I do like the flow of this one though, but that flow is sort of disrupted in the fifth stanza. I, however, like the second to the last one "I fear that whatever I pick, I will lose."

Keep Writing. ^___^

Posted 9 Years Ago


They say “A journey of a thousand begins with the first step”
Not bad. Nice work.


Posted 10 Years Ago


really beautiful poem , makes want to keep reading it , the rhyming is good as well as the concept, great job!!

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really like the poem itself. It makes you think. You never know which choice to take and there are millions of them.

As far as the rhyming, I cant depict a set scheme (like aabb or abab). But the words you picked were good except that in the last stanza you rhymed "me" with "me". I might pick a different word for one of those.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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