Prologue

The smooth, cold walls resemble milled marble, sanded by the feet of a million worshippers. The dark blue vein throbs with a dull luminosity, guiding the gentle specks of dust in ever decreasing circles.

 

There is no seam. There is no cut. There appears to be no edge.

 

The wall becomes the floor, but the non-elucidean geometry confuses the eye and it becomes impossible to distinguish the floor from the ceiling, despite the obvious separate presence of the walls.

 

The main body of the marble is a mottled green-grey, resembling the bark of a tree gnarled by countless aeons, forgotten in the bleak dullness.

 

There are no shadows, only movements; slow and rhythmic, yet chaotic and suggestive of regression. There is no focus, just an expanse that is impossible to truly grasp. It is as if an understanding of the whole is felt before an experience of any aspect of it is felt.

 

In the eternity of a moment, measured by the throbbing of the blue vein, a passage becomes apparent. Whether it formed or had previously been unnoticed is unclear, but its presence creates a soft calm against the dull oppression of the bleak surrounding encasement.

 

In the distance, echoed from within, comes a solemn deafening whisper.

Author's Note

I am interested to see what people think of the empty protagonist: I want there to be a noticable movement of the narration, but without a solid protagonist at the moment. Whether this protagonist is filled in as a first-person or second-person character has yet to be decided.

Reviews

[Pamela]

Very holistic, the tone really appeals to a post-post modern sensibility. This piece is both clausterphobic and expansive at the same time. I think that the protagonist should be in the second person narrative. Probably more difficult to write, but a little more interesting, a character encompassing everyman and like none other. Like a soul within a soul, that way the empty protagonist has some room to move. I think the genre you write in is interesting, keep it up. I look forward to seeing how this story progresses.

[Rogue_Nightwater]

Wickedly Lovely are the only words that can describe this piece for me.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I like the last line .. it peaks lots of interest for me ...either first or second person, sounds good ..
Chloe
xoxo

[CharlieO]

So this is now part of a book is my dear? I just want some points for posting a review hee hee. But seriously I would love to hear more about your plans to make this into a book.
xxxx