Slipped Away

Worried time after time,

What is to come?

Is this your cover?

To hide the true life you hold,

Beaten to the core of civilization,

Lifeless in your own crawling skin,

Is it even the truth?

Coming from cold blue lisping lips,

With the thoughts of a cold blooded killer,

As every word you speak is another shard of glass,

Yet who am I to question?

Blood on my hands,

Tearing out hearts,

Lifeless and deceiving,

Is this how it’s to be?

With our lives at stake,

Two cold hearted killers,

Under the same roof,

What blood is to be spilt next?

Lacerating each other’s heart,

Tearing into the skin with shards of glass,

Minds slipping in black evergreens,

Author's Note

Not what I was going for, but it works.

Reviews

[Matty Bosox]

Well Serena, this is beautifully macabre..Very sinister and unique most of all..Very incredibly unique!! I love every sweet, sugar-filled word for even though it rots the fabric of being it is so, SO good....If Quentin Tarantino were to read this he would have wet dreams about Natural Born Killers and Death Proof....Your excellent use of such terrorizing words is just as beautiful as Amy Lee's voice...Excellent job Serena....Although it seems you didn't end it unless thats what you were going for...Either way, Great work. :o)

[Serena Kaye]

Dude, you're amazing, thanks so much.C:
Love the way you compared it to things,
Natural Born Killers

[Matty Bosox]

It was all my pleasure Serena...To be able to review such a great work from somebody who obviously put alot of thought into it, I feel obligated to give a very storied review...I hate people who review with three words...For instance "I liked it" or "That was good"....For a writer who puts their heart and soul into their work this kind of simple review is frustrating...I hope you get a chance to read my project..But like I said..All my pleasure Serena..Beautiful work..

[Serena Kaye]

Ooh, I agree with you on that. I think I shall go read yours.

[Just Charles B]

A great piece. This is my kind of poem! Perfect to me.

[Rob Santana]

Raw,dark,confusion with a pinch of brutality,haha.awesome write.

[Tai Ryens]

Real poignant piece you've here. I just adore the certain aspect of madness and melancholy; just the type of writing that I love.

[kublakhan27]

Very deep, with some really vivid imagery...nice work^^

[Persephone]

Love this - quite moving - I really enjoyed your metaphor - great job!

[TheJordBaker]

a very strong piece of writing, powerful images and questions. the picture you created is very clear, nice work, well done :)

[khalid]

very nicely written. it has alot of metaphors as well as symbols written in a very nice way...i liked the philosophy in it as well...
well done really..