You, Me, and my Virginity

You, Me, and my Virginity

A Poem by UpComesDown
"

Caution: A rape story

"

I feel your hands

all over me.

Too much.

Stop please.

And you say

But I thought you loved me.

And then give me no time to answer

I find my voice

But I do love you

Then why not you say

No No No

My voice

disappeared.

it's gone,

hidden behind your hand

I can't speak

I can't scream!

But by then it's to late.

It happened

I can't stop it.

I can't stop you.

If you want something ,

You take it.

And so goes the story

of You,

Me,

and My Virginity.

© 2009 UpComesDown


Advertise Here
Want to advertise here? Get started for as little as $5

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

I worked with rape survivors for some time, and it is the most under reported crime of all. Many people feel like they did something to provoke it especially since victims usually know the rapist. I am grateful when I hear or see people coming out of the shadows and speaking up. You did a wonderful job on this, and thank you so much for sharing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.




Reviews

I liked this so much. I am 7 years late but i can feel what you say in this poem. I also believe we have similarities in out writings.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Very sad and something many of us can relate to in some way. This poem is a great way to speak out so keep writing. Your voice will help a lot of people...

Voice


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Thanks for putting up this entry in my contest. There are no words for the horror and sadness here.

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I worked with rape survivors for some time, and it is the most under reported crime of all. Many people feel like they did something to provoke it especially since victims usually know the rapist. I am grateful when I hear or see people coming out of the shadows and speaking up. You did a wonderful job on this, and thank you so much for sharing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

The idea for this poem was for it to seem like everything was going too fast and barely made sense. It may have hindered some readers but i have complete confidence in them.

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

It's simple and it's heart-wrenching to know that people get away with this. You told your story the best way you knew how.

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

1127 Views
6 Reviews
Rating
Shelved in 1 Library
Added on May 23, 2009
Last Updated on May 23, 2009

Author

UpComesDown
UpComesDown

Like You Care, PA



About
Let's skip the pleasantries and just read my work, okay? more..

Writing
Hate me Hate me

A Poem by UpComesDown



Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


The Path The Path

A Poem by Patricia


Alone Alone

A Poem by Nick Almanza


Open Open

A Story by Voice11