The Enchanter

The Enchanter

A Poem by Utkarsh Singh

The Enchanter

Yesterday saw a man 
In the middle of the street
Holding a can 
With a gap between ground and his feet 

He was an Enchanter
Showing some trick 
Told by my sister
Standing upon a brick 

She could not see his face 
So she walked towards him
But soon gains some pace
Because lights were going dim 

By the time she got there
That man had left away
Noticing she was the only one standing here 
Her world turns to gray

Searching him all the way
Her eyes filled with tears 
 Love you , she wants to say
When words choke ,as her neck sears 

That day I saw another magic
This time with the heart of my sister
Which was taken away with just a trick 
Performed by that Enchanter

~ uTkArSh SiNgH

© 2014 Utkarsh Singh


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This was a very fun poem and a good story. It's sad that your sister didn't get to talk to him. Just a couple of things I would change: "here world turns to gray" should be "her world..."
"she want to say " should be "she wants" or "she wanted" also "gain some pace" should be "gains" or "gained".
"by the time she reaches there" seems odd maybe you should say "by the time she got there " or "by the time she arrived there "

Keep writing this was very good! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Utkarsh Singh

6 Years Ago

thanks encantado.........i have corrected them .....btw these were my typing error .....thanks for h.. read more



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A good attempt.. Well written :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Utkarsh Singh

6 Years Ago

thank gurleen dear
Gurleen Saluja

6 Years Ago

You are welcome
Utkarsh Singh

6 Years Ago

.............:D
Very nice and interesting poem :)
Magic is really something that can spellbound someone.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Utkarsh Singh

6 Years Ago

true ayushi ..and thanks for your review ............:D
"Searching him all the way
Her eyes filled with tears
Love you , she wants to say
When words choke ,as her neck sears"...........so melancholy ...a story beautifully unfolded ...nice work my friend...thanks for sharing!


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Utkarsh Singh

6 Years Ago

thanks for the review chitra.....:D
Utkarsh, you are growing in every new work you pen! I look forward to more work from you!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Utkarsh Singh

6 Years Ago

thank you rachelle
Well, your writing errors are corrected already so I don't find it necessary to point it out again. Other than that, quite a good poem it was :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Utkarsh Singh

6 Years Ago

thanks .....:D
An enchanting poem Utkarsh, nicely done.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Utkarsh Singh

6 Years Ago

thanks ......:D
The poor dear sister :)
There is an element of magic in this poem that touches the readers' heart.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Utkarsh Singh

6 Years Ago

thank you LSG for your precious review
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Pi
Great poem! You do have a few grammar errors but I'm sure if you keep writing your grammar will gradually get better :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Utkarsh Singh

6 Years Ago

Pi are there more grammatical mistakes other than what encantado pointed out ....?
Pi

6 Years Ago

I don't believe so! I noticed your mistakes but reviewed the poem later sorry if I confused you :)
Utkarsh Singh

6 Years Ago

k................:D
I love it when stories are told in a beautiful poem, work on the grammar, you are going great

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Utkarsh Singh

6 Years Ago

thanks brother .......and yes i'm trying my level best to improve my grammar ........

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Added on April 30, 2014
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Utkarsh Singh

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