There she stands

A no-maqta, no-refrain, non-conventional ghazal.

There she stands, bedecking that place,
all eyes are turning to her lovely face.

She is so pretty that all girls curtsy,
she is the one whom all boys chase.

She is engulfed by graceful flowers,
the flowers shy, such is her grace.

Those who are praised by everyone
say that she deserves all the praise.

All guys are racing to win her love,
unaware that I've already won the race.

Author's Note

Please review. Criticism is always welcome.

Reviews

[Usman Muhammad]

So you won the heart....mine too (just kidding). Well done, a beautiful poem it is.
I really liked your phrasing. The poem's rhythm was very nice.
The way you described the feelings of others towards her is interesting and charming too.
Will be looking forward to read your other writings too.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account shifted)]

Thanks for your interesting and kind review.

[Philip Muls]

Less is more! I love the ease with which this is written, almost magical phrasing and wording.

A nice, cocky twist at the end.

Well done.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account shifted)]

Thanks for your kind review.

[Peter Rogerson]

It's good to be the winner of any race, especially a race of hearts...

[Vatsal Rohilla (account shifted)]

Thanks for your review, Peter.

[forgotten_ghosts]

Great poem! You create a vivid image of the girl. Nice construction and the twist at the end is really awesome!
Greetings,
Thomas

[Vatsal Rohilla (account shifted)]

Thanks for your kind review, friend.

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of description. You create perfect beauty and photo for the reader.
"She is engulfed by graceful flowers,
the flowers shy, such is her grace."
The above lines were my favorite. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Vatsal Rohilla (account shifted)]

Thanks for your kind review, sir.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. A amazing poem.

[David Scott]

When we appreciate the one who is with us, this is how it seems. We see others admiring and desiring our gifted love and it is only a thing to affirm rather than cause a jealous insecurity to show.
There is a simple innocence and youthful feel blended with a mature emotional state of mind.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account shifted)]

That is very true, indeed. Thanks for your review.

[Sami Khalil]

Triumphant and rewarding. You have won and that is all that matters. A splendid write....:))))

[Vatsal Rohilla (account shifted)]

Thank you for your review and words of praise.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. ....^)))))

[Happy hours]

All guys are racing to win her love,
unaware that I've already won the race
haha really nice and awesome...

[Vatsal Rohilla (account shifted)]

Thanks for your words of praise, HH

[Pryde Foltz]

Enchanting, fun and well-constructed. Great game, Vassal:)

[Vatsal Rohilla (account shifted)]

Thanks for your review ma'am.

[H.L. Cerveise]

I for sure have no criticism of this poem. Your word choices are great and the imagery it paints when I read it are wonderful. I like that in the end with"I've already won the race." If every person felt this way about the one they are with the world would be a lot better place.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account shifted)]

Thanks for your review, sir