A Poem by Venompen

I wrote this shortly after getting Jak 2 back from my cousin, and playing through about 80 percent of the game. Credit where its due, I got the idea from Blade and Blood's Razorhail.

Baron of blood, I thank you.
For the voice you gave me to curse you.
For the power you gave me to kill you.
For the motivation to destroy you.

You stole two years from me.
Two years of torture and pain.
But now I am finally free,
Darkness flows in every vein.

I am coming for you baron.
With darkness, guns, and claws,
This city, this vile haven,
Shall be free of your laws.

Nothing will stop me.
Not steel faced demons
Nor warriors, bloody.
I will find you baron.

And when I find you, you will die.

© 2010 Venompen

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Cool, I love it!

Posted 10 Years Ago

This was amazing, and then, I find out it's inspired by a video game. That's just ingenious.
Awesome. As a video game adoree myself, I shall now try to write one based off of a video game.

Posted 10 Years Ago

Given thought ... (I must research this game, now) ...anyway, as I said, given thoughts of blood and guns makes me hear that "man sound" Tim the Tool Man Taylor does. Google it if you don't know...

Indeed, it is an awesome write, had flow that I got used to, until you smacked me in the face with the last line.

(In other words... I enjoyed it)

If video games were muses for everyone, do you suppose we would all stop to write? Glad you did.

Have a great day,


Posted 10 Years Ago

I love it.. it's intense and raw.. great write..x

Posted 10 Years Ago

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Simply outstanding, I like this esp... the last stanza.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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Added on September 22, 2010
Last Updated on September 22, 2010



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