Long Haiku-Alice In Wonderland-Part 1

Long Haiku-Alice In Wonderland-Part 1

A Poem by ~VertoAtrum~
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I've taken many haikus and formed them into a long poem about the fantastic take of Alice In Wonderland.

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Young Alice Kingsley,

On a boring lesson day,

Wandered in the grass

 

She saw something strange,

Could it be? Was it? She gasped,

It bounded away

 

Was it a rabbit?

How silly, it couldn’t be,

A white rabbit, there!

 

“I’ll be late! So late!”

It spoke? How peculiar ,

She chased after it

 

Suddenly, she fell,

Down, down, down the rabbit hole,

Away from her world

 

Upside down, side-up,

Through pianos, trinkets, beds,

She fell down, down, down

 

She hit the floor, hard,

There was a table, and doors,

Why so many doors?

 

She tried them all, twice,

None of them opened, not one,

But on the table

 

A bottle appeared,

A tag on it said “DRINK ME”,

Well, it’s worth trying

 

She drank it, and then,

She stared growing taller,

Head at the ceiling

 

“This won’t do!”, she said,

Then, from beneath the table,

 A small box appeared

 

The tag said “EAT ME”,

“May as well”, she took a bite,

She started to shrink

 

But then she looked up,

There was a key that may work,

On one of the doors

 

She drank, grew again,

Now she had the key

She tried every door

 

© 2013 ~VertoAtrum~


Author's Note

~VertoAtrum~
Please excuse some of the grammar and how the sentences work together, haikus aren't easy to work with. Also, I apologize that I dragged some of it out. I wanted to get all the key elements included in it (for example, the fact that she had to drink, grow, eat, shrink, do it all again etc).

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indeed haikus are tough......haven't been able to write myself one!
this was fantastic as per haiku structure......and the story is well narrated.....
but the grammar and stuff, you already know about that!!
well written
I liked it!!
:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is fun!! Haiku's are hard ( and I can't write them) but this like reading or watching Alice again!
Liked it! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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