I think its excellent. I like how you mingle real life invasion with your own self belief. Keep up with your goals and your writings too! You have talent i see. You should try and write a little (at least) 4 or 5 days a week. It will surprise you what you will get done in your writes.
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Thank you, Frankie. I'll certainly try to write more. Time doesn't always permit it, though. Your th.. read moreThank you, Frankie. I'll certainly try to write more. Time doesn't always permit it, though. Your thoughtful comments and support are appreciated. 🌹
The military symbols that pervade the poem are interesting. They are not only warlike, but Nazi warlike, which comes across as an allusion to aggression and ruthlessness. It appears someone has said things "to dissuade me from my art." Could this be someone trying to woo the speaker and pressuring her for more attention at the expense of dance? Or could it be a harsh instructor who is trying to undermine her confidence? Whatever, the last verse indicates they will fail. First time I have ever seen the Browning Automatic Rifle linked to ballet.
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Thank you, John! I am so happy that someone caught the BAR reference.....as in the rifle and the bal.. read moreThank you, John! I am so happy that someone caught the BAR reference.....as in the rifle and the ballet barre, as well! As for the voice behind it? It comes from many angles including the self. Thank you so much for shedding more light on this poem. It's very appreciated! 🌹
Self doubt is clearly illustrated in your wordplay - the poignancy of this write is shared by many and reminded me of this; Van Gogh is reported to have said this: "If you hear a voice within you say ‘You cannot paint,’ then by all means paint, and that voice will be silenced." Thus the more your resolve to conquer self doubt, the quicker it is defeated. Great share my friend...:-)
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Thank you, Phil. That is a great quote you have shared. One must always persevere, no matter the obs.. read moreThank you, Phil. That is a great quote you have shared. One must always persevere, no matter the obstacles. A shame Van Gogh didn't take his own advice in the end! Thank you very much for sharing these words. 🌹
oh i like it ... fine work with the war machine personifications .. to speak on life ... aspirations .. obstacles .. attacks even .. well done says i! .. the closing pirouettes, i think are fabulous .. one can see your protagonist running away or escaping with style .. dancing on to better things .. i like to watch the fights .. when one is pressed into a corner of the ring they can get "stuck" there and take a real pummeling or turn and "slip" out of it .. many times putting the aggressor in the corner .. much like your dancer .. "expell defeat" .. great stuff! needed positivity in these rather dark times .. we need to come out winners don't we!
E.
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Thank you, Mr. Einstein. I think you would enjoy watching my fellow company ballerinas as the fan of.. read moreThank you, Mr. Einstein. I think you would enjoy watching my fellow company ballerinas as the fan of pugilism you said you are. They fight with each other all the time! It's a cutthroat business at the best of times. Sometimes embracing the positives is the only way to move forward. Your in depth thoughts here are most appreciated. 🌹
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ahahaha ..i have read stories and watched movies that had those kinds of "fights" as part of the plo.. read moreahahaha ..i have read stories and watched movies that had those kinds of "fights" as part of the plots .. but thinking or you dancing .. i just would not think it .. i don't know why .. i suppose novels and movies are fictitious and you .. are not ;)
An accomplished write with great metaphors and natural sounding rhyme. I particularly enjoyed your ending lines. What better way to get rid of those negatives than to dance them into distraction. Beautiful work Viktoria.
Chris
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Thank you, Chris. Yes, you are indeed correct. I try to dance any negatives away at any given chance.. read moreThank you, Chris. Yes, you are indeed correct. I try to dance any negatives away at any given chance. It can be a beautifully brutal world sometimes. A pleasure to meet you and thank you for your thoughts and words here. 🌹
I loved how you used the language dear Viktoria. Each line, strong and demanding. I enjoyed the complete poem and thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
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Thank you, Coyote. Glad you enjoyed this effort of mine. Your support and comments are always apprec.. read moreThank you, Coyote. Glad you enjoyed this effort of mine. Your support and comments are always appreciated. 🌹
I love this. It's so similar to a poem I wrote called, "Ballerina."
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Thank you, light and ashes. Glad you enjoyed this poem. I'll seek out your version very shortly. �.. read moreThank you, light and ashes. Glad you enjoyed this poem. I'll seek out your version very shortly. 🌹
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You're welcome, and I can just send it to you. I think that would make it a lot easier.
What an amazing and relatable write dear Viktoria! An invasion of pessimism outside and an inside war of self doubt to crossfire that.. It's so visual. Only gyrating in self belief can do the trick... Awesome piece!
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Thank you, Sima. You nailed the poem in three lines! I am glad you enjoyed this effort. Thank you ve.. read moreThank you, Sima. You nailed the poem in three lines! I am glad you enjoyed this effort. Thank you very much for sharing your thoughts and kind words. 🌹
A battle within and without...the two penultimate verses are sheer determination and resolve. The reader pirouttes with you emotionally. Nothing contrived, spirit revived!
Just so you know, apart from the spitfire tanks and grenades, there is poision ivy around too. Sugary sweet slayer. Sly marking poems down. Regardless, your poetry has arrived.
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Thank you, DIVYA. There are battles within and out for all of us everyday, so I am glad you understo.. read moreThank you, DIVYA. There are battles within and out for all of us everyday, so I am glad you understood this poem. Your kind words and tips are appreciated by this newcomer. 🌹
Hi, I'm Viktoria!😊
A professional ballerina hailing from Sofia but currently living in Lviv while chasing my dream of the Mariinsky Ballet. An amateur at all things literary and driven to w.. more..