Wonderment

Wonderment

A Poem by Vikrantsingh
"

Love to my Life & My Wife

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Life was childlike

Love made it perplexed still gratifying

Travelled fleetly but not in your absence

It is lofty

It is burnished

Adhere to me today

Leave me for noone

I'm your & you be mine

I loved it the way 

You aforementioned it twice

You love me & I responded

I love you too

Since, then

I want to olfactory perception you tegument

I want to olfactory perception you hair

I want to gustatory sensation your lips

You are almightiness

You are my wifey

You varied my life



© 2013 Vikrantsingh


Author's Note

Vikrantsingh
Just Be True :) & Review :)

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This is a nice love poem, Singh.. so sweet to write this for your wife.. I did have some troubles with these lines:

I want to olfactory perception you tegument --what is tegument? and why not just say "smell"?
I want to olfactory perception you hair -- again, just say "smell"
I want to gustatory sensation your lips -- why not say "taste"?
You are almightiness -- do you mean divine?

Those lines sound so technical, it reads like a medical journal instead of a love poem.. Hope you don't mind the questions and suggestions.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vikrantsingh

11 Years Ago

:P I was trying something new here ;) If i won't use those glossy words.. which you mentioned techni.. read more
Ravyne Hawke

11 Years Ago

I understand wanting to do something new and fresh.. I just think there are other ways.. like showin.. read more
Vikrantsingh

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much :D



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A really nice dedication, and a lovely write. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


This piece is sweet. Lines 14, 15, and 16 are my favourite. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vikrantsingh

11 Years Ago

Thanks a lot dearie - for your visit and reviewing this poem :)
I'm happy to read your words o.. read more
Super and stay blessed my friend

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vikrantsingh

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)
Lovely dedication...your emotion seeps through every syllable :) x

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vikrantsingh

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much PoppySilver :)
Thank you so much for you time and review :)
- Singh :)
Great work and you have a blessed life :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vikrantsingh

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)
Aahaan... Another love poem from Mr. Husband for his wifey :P

Nice one VikrantSingh Parmar :)
Godji Bless you more love and be loved :) :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vikrantsingh

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much dearie :)
Stay blessed :D
- Singh :)
Nice emotions! Thanks for sharing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vikrantsingh

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much :) Cody :)
A couple of errors I think but nothing major.. I enjoyed reading.. Loving and emotions rang in it.. Rose

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vikrantsingh

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much Rose :)
The bond of love. A sweet ode to the wife Singh.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vikrantsingh

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much Shaun... Will check you poems soon :)
- Singh :)
Shaun Payton

11 Years Ago

Cool:) Should be fun
Nice and romantic poem, Singh. I won't leave any suggestion here but you can consider those suggested by Lori and SyberRose.

The Romantic Indian writer is here again. So sweet. God bless you and your wife!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vikrantsingh

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much Dhaye :P Yes i'm trying make this fresh :P
- Singh :)

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Added on August 9, 2013
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Vikrantsingh

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