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Page 3 The Mysterious Girl

Page 3 The Mysterious Girl

A Story by Vin
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Last month, I was in New-Delhi and decided to take a taxi to Noida. Delhi Noida road is fun and the taxi driver was quiet engaging.

I shared the taxi with a girl. She looked scared, mysterious and not talking much. I started chatting with the driver


He had so many experiences to share- especially of drunk travellers, police checking, couple making out in the back-seat, annoying kids blah blah.


I told him about the unplanned and low-cost travels I make. Both were good sport in talking and listening.


Suddenly, the girl opened up : "My marriage was fixed, I didn;t like the groom and so I ran off. Only you two know that I'm here."

The taxi driver was scared and told her to catch the next train and go back. I felt kind of thrilled as this was first story of this kind I was experiencing.


She was stepping out of home for the first time and didn't know what to do. The driver was scared as this would land both of us in trouble. I made a plan.


"Listen Tanvi, "that was her name- "we can help you only if your parents are aware. " You call them and tell that you are not willing to marry. Don't tell them where you are, instead convey that you are safe and with a girl-friend. This would ease some tension."Then we will find a way."


"My father would kill me" She was s**t scared.

That seemed funny to me : " Sure, he will- otherwise we will go to jail and you will get married to the same guy."


The phone call, for me,was hilarious as a third party. It took 45 minutes, lots of tears and shouting for her to convince her dad.

Meanwhile I found a hostel nearby and put her there for 1 month. Luckily she found a small job in this time.


last week, I got a letter from her. It said that her parents had visited her. Everything seem content now and there was a jacket for me bought with her first salary.


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By far the most brilliant storyline I've read from you in this series. This is a story worth telling (fascinating!) & it holds the reader's interest. Downside - it feels like a factual explanation & almost completely TELLING instead of showing (great story but bad writing). Still, your material is so strong, it's compelling & the reader is glued to your interesting story. You really need to practice more dialogue. This SHOWS a person to us (how does she speak? what is her voice like? what mannerisms does she have to show how afraid she is?), instead of TELLING us what she says and how she feels. Your writing is strong and it could be stronger if you SHOW instead of tell (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vin

6 Months Ago

loved this review! thanks for sharing, will definitely make me stronger!



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It seems like the story itself hurrying to its own conclusion abruptly... .. but still teaches a lesson how to deal the tough situation rather to much panicking about it...

Posted 3 Months Ago


Some of my most learned experiences came from traveling the world. It was so kind of you to help this girl find an alternative to her life. And a great story came out of it!

Posted 4 Months Ago


Really interesting tale of a fixed marriage that one party didn't wish to happen. Instead of just doing it to appease the parents and not themselves. That do happen in some cultures and countries across this world. I really like your storytelling and matter of fact, laid back way you tell the tale. And how you helped her. Get her freedom to be herself. And actually enjoy life for herself. And also find peace with her parents. And the gift she got you with her first wages. Made me smile.

Posted 6 Months Ago


The storyline is quite interesting, but the story in general feels a bit incomplete or not satifying, somehow. I wish it was more elaborate.
Keep up the good work.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vin

6 Months Ago

Thank u for the review! will keep in mind
By far the most brilliant storyline I've read from you in this series. This is a story worth telling (fascinating!) & it holds the reader's interest. Downside - it feels like a factual explanation & almost completely TELLING instead of showing (great story but bad writing). Still, your material is so strong, it's compelling & the reader is glued to your interesting story. You really need to practice more dialogue. This SHOWS a person to us (how does she speak? what is her voice like? what mannerisms does she have to show how afraid she is?), instead of TELLING us what she says and how she feels. Your writing is strong and it could be stronger if you SHOW instead of tell (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vin

6 Months Ago

loved this review! thanks for sharing, will definitely make me stronger!
Interesting story. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vin

6 Months Ago

Thank u. keep reading this space
Lea Sheryn

6 Months Ago

You're welcome! I will.

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