Beautiful. I think that haiku has a special potential to startle us into thinking. And I would say you are certainly tapping into that. For one, your use of the haiku as form really matches the themes you wish to express. The repetition of syllables in a strict pattern resembles a kind of cyclicity, and especially the unbreakable cyclicity of life and death (or, seeing as the leaves fall from a tree, the experience of many lives and deaths, occurring over and over, every season). In the second stanza, I enjoyed the last word: "sole". It can be read as a pun on "soul" and "one" or even the "sole" of a shoe", all of which give weight to the poem. Finally, while I like how you combine mediums (visual, lyric, and instrumental), I have to admit that I turned off the music when reading. I can't tell why, really. I'm not sure if I found it distracting or if I found the words musical enough in and of themselves. It could also be that I'm a stickler for doing one thing at a time, whether that is listening to instruments or reading something. Or, I just don't know what I'm talking about, and it's best taken with a grain of salt!
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10 Years Ago
I find no error in what makes you happy, it's not imposing on anything nor anyone. All's well, and I.. read moreI find no error in what makes you happy, it's not imposing on anything nor anyone. All's well, and I very much so thank you. I am very grateful for your words.
Beautiful. I think that haiku has a special potential to startle us into thinking. And I would say you are certainly tapping into that. For one, your use of the haiku as form really matches the themes you wish to express. The repetition of syllables in a strict pattern resembles a kind of cyclicity, and especially the unbreakable cyclicity of life and death (or, seeing as the leaves fall from a tree, the experience of many lives and deaths, occurring over and over, every season). In the second stanza, I enjoyed the last word: "sole". It can be read as a pun on "soul" and "one" or even the "sole" of a shoe", all of which give weight to the poem. Finally, while I like how you combine mediums (visual, lyric, and instrumental), I have to admit that I turned off the music when reading. I can't tell why, really. I'm not sure if I found it distracting or if I found the words musical enough in and of themselves. It could also be that I'm a stickler for doing one thing at a time, whether that is listening to instruments or reading something. Or, I just don't know what I'm talking about, and it's best taken with a grain of salt!
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
I find no error in what makes you happy, it's not imposing on anything nor anyone. All's well, and I.. read moreI find no error in what makes you happy, it's not imposing on anything nor anyone. All's well, and I very much so thank you. I am very grateful for your words.
Yes, the leaves fall from the tree and though they have died, they are quite beautiful and very much part of the circle of life. The metaphor in the second poem is apt. We live our lives to the fullest, but there is a time when we reach the final destination....every one of us must. The spirit lives on. Beautifully written poetry. Lydi**
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10 Years Ago
Thanks very much, Lydia.
No one can better articulate how the perfection is, and how one season seems to run in the other like a circle, what a beautiful haiku ...
Vivid, through the cold air, until it dies... and silently waits to be reborn...
Nothing is more beautiful than to be one with nature, and with yourself :)
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