A Timely Beginning

A Timely Beginning

A Poem by V. P. Trujillo
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A most lovely sight, for end is illusion and beginnings reign supreme.

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Journey

Cyclical swirls down

A falling bronzed leaf, ‘tis dead

Before hitting floor

 

Conclude

Crisp and old, she had

Reached her destination, to

Then be stamped of life

Furthermore, tattered by sole

© 2013 V. P. Trujillo


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V. P. Trujillo

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Beautiful. I think that haiku has a special potential to startle us into thinking. And I would say you are certainly tapping into that. For one, your use of the haiku as form really matches the themes you wish to express. The repetition of syllables in a strict pattern resembles a kind of cyclicity, and especially the unbreakable cyclicity of life and death (or, seeing as the leaves fall from a tree, the experience of many lives and deaths, occurring over and over, every season). In the second stanza, I enjoyed the last word: "sole". It can be read as a pun on "soul" and "one" or even the "sole" of a shoe", all of which give weight to the poem. Finally, while I like how you combine mediums (visual, lyric, and instrumental), I have to admit that I turned off the music when reading. I can't tell why, really. I'm not sure if I found it distracting or if I found the words musical enough in and of themselves. It could also be that I'm a stickler for doing one thing at a time, whether that is listening to instruments or reading something. Or, I just don't know what I'm talking about, and it's best taken with a grain of salt!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

V. P. Trujillo

10 Years Ago

I find no error in what makes you happy, it's not imposing on anything nor anyone. All's well, and I.. read more



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Nice music that seems fitting for this writing, nice picture too. I really like how you write about nature in this.

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V. P. Trujillo

10 Years Ago

Yes, this took place a few weeks ago.
Beautiful. I think that haiku has a special potential to startle us into thinking. And I would say you are certainly tapping into that. For one, your use of the haiku as form really matches the themes you wish to express. The repetition of syllables in a strict pattern resembles a kind of cyclicity, and especially the unbreakable cyclicity of life and death (or, seeing as the leaves fall from a tree, the experience of many lives and deaths, occurring over and over, every season). In the second stanza, I enjoyed the last word: "sole". It can be read as a pun on "soul" and "one" or even the "sole" of a shoe", all of which give weight to the poem. Finally, while I like how you combine mediums (visual, lyric, and instrumental), I have to admit that I turned off the music when reading. I can't tell why, really. I'm not sure if I found it distracting or if I found the words musical enough in and of themselves. It could also be that I'm a stickler for doing one thing at a time, whether that is listening to instruments or reading something. Or, I just don't know what I'm talking about, and it's best taken with a grain of salt!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

V. P. Trujillo

10 Years Ago

I find no error in what makes you happy, it's not imposing on anything nor anyone. All's well, and I.. read more
Yes, the leaves fall from the tree and though they have died, they are quite beautiful and very much part of the circle of life. The metaphor in the second poem is apt. We live our lives to the fullest, but there is a time when we reach the final destination....every one of us must. The spirit lives on. Beautifully written poetry. Lydi**

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

V. P. Trujillo

10 Years Ago

Thanks very much, Lydia.
No one can better articulate how the perfection is, and how one season seems to run in the other like a circle, what a beautiful haiku ...

Vivid, through the cold air, until it dies... and silently waits to be reborn...
Nothing is more beautiful than to be one with nature, and with yourself :)

- Elisa


Posted 10 Years Ago


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V. P. Trujillo

10 Years Ago

Thanks, Sis. x)

10 Years Ago

Always my pleasure ...
understanding Journey was way easy at least for me. and that was way too amazing my friend.



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V. P. Trujillo

10 Years Ago

I'm very glad you enjoyed it.

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Tags: Haiku, Autumn, Fall, Trees, Leaves, Bronze, Gold, Decay, Begin, Cycle, Change, Seasons, Poem, Poetic, Poetry, Beauty, Life, Death, Illusion, Gorgeous, Nature, Cycles, Circles, Forever, Ever Lasting

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V. P. Trujillo

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