The Man I Loved

The Man I Loved

A Poem by Violet Stone
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Poem contains themes of depression, break-ups and suggests of suicide. Leave me a review please and remember to read the note to the reviewers! Sorry that the poem is short! Enjoy...

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The Man I Loved

The night was cold and getting dark,
As I walked alone through the forest park.

And my heart hurt as I felt lonely,
Because he was my one and only.

The trees shook while the harsh wind blew,
I sobbed quietly, I guess our love was not true.

Already, the man I loved had moved on,
He was far away now and long gone.

I still cannot believe he broke my heart,
I should never have loved him from the start.

He walked away from me, Would I ever know why?
It soon was clear that on this night, I wanted to die.

By Violet Stone

© 2016 Violet Stone


Author's Note

Violet Stone
This was the first poem I ever wrote when I started getting into doing poetry so It may not be one of my best but I would really appreciate a review to hear what people think about it. Thank you for reading!

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hmm dark and dreary setting, I always love poems that are on the darker side. My favorite poet is Edgar Allan Poe, so obviously darker settings always catch my eye. I loved the imagery here and I could feel the emotion, I've been in this situation before so I know how it feels to be heart broken and feeling like all you want to do is die

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Violet Stone

5 Years Ago

Lol I'm really glad to hear that :3 By the way, would you mind if I gave you a mention as I sort of .. read more
Gabby Nieves

5 Years Ago

Omg I wouldn't mind at all haha, go for it
Violet Stone

5 Years Ago

Lol, thank you :)



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It is pretty good for someone's first poem ever. Also, in the fifth line, shouldn't it be "trees".

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Heartbreak can be terrible, especially when you're the one who is left broken. This was a sad write full of emotion. I can connect to this piece and it pulled at my heart. Great write.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A deep sadness is evident here.
We all know that empty feeling when this happens.
A great piece of writing.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love the darkness of the poem. Keep it up!!!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Once you love someone, you never really stop loving them. It's loves hidden beast that no one really wants to tell you about. I love this piece. It's honest, and you can feel the heartbreak as you read it, good job :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Violet Stone

5 Years Ago

Yea, I agree. That was very nicely put :) Thank you very much for the review
Well you did a very good job with this poem.
I assume your heart is now mended.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Violet Stone

5 Years Ago

Thanks and yes, my heart is fine now although I am still burdened with scar of the past :)
You like walking in the rain drowning in your tears. Over a love that wasn't really real or full of his emotions. He walk the other way and left you in shambles you were probably all shook up with emotions you could not control as he just when on without you as if nothing happened.

best to you on your recovery catch you on the rebound.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

good flow, like the rhyming scheme. Imagery was great! Emotions flowed on well with the story as well, dark but a great poem!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Violet Stone

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I'm happy you likes the flow and the imagery. I try to get my readers to imagin.. read more
Break ups are harsh but what's even worse is not knowing why, being clueless ...But as long as this someone moved on ,well it's clear he/she did not deserve love from the start !
A Very nicely-worded poem , love it !


Posted 5 Years Ago


Violet Stone

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much. I'm glad you understood it and liked it :)
Mélania Woolf

5 Years Ago

It's a pleasure ! ^^
Violet Stone

5 Years Ago

:3 Hehe lol
I think it's good but I didn't feel any sadness due to me being a cold hearted person again nor that I never decided to fall in love

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Violet Stone

5 Years Ago

The poem was made more to get people to understand the feels of those that are heart broken than to .. read more
❀Subaru_Nyaa!❀

5 Years Ago

I am not scared to fall in love,I just don't that many girls due to me only knowing one girl

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Added on July 5, 2014
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