Hollow

This poem is about being empty inside and basically - suffering. Its a little dark minded in a depressed sort of way and suggests themes of suicide.

Hollow

I do not know why or how this has come to be,

But what was once there, I can no longer see.

Never before have I felt this pain,

The cries of sufferers and tears in the rain.

I can not ever escape this feeling inside,

I can remember every time I have cried.

My body is nothing but hollow and dark,

These scar have certainly left their mark.

Life is horrid, broken and shattered,

It has gone - everything that mattered.

I have lost faith in everything I cared,

Will you hold me when I am scared?

I am empty and people do not care,

I feel invisible - nothing is there.

Everything has disappeared and left me,

Its locked up my emotions and thrown away the key.

Hollow inside, I can feel not a thing,

May I leave to hear the angels sing?

By Violet Stone

Author's Note

Hoping everything is spelled correctly, please give me a review and tell me what you think about it if you have time and thanks for reading! (If you like this, you might like my other poems since most of them are all about the same sort of thing)

Reviews

[Yasmin]

Simple words describing an honest feeling of emptiness
I can easily relate to it and since we barely have a spiritual side this feeling increases most of the time and leads to crazy unexplained attitude
You should know though that this should not hold you back and that its just a feeling that grows with the things you want to see so stand up and search for the good things to write something inspirational
Great work and I will for sure read more of your writings
Well done

[Violet Stone]

Thank you very much for your kind words and I will bare that in mind. Its also great to hear that you will be reading more of my writing. Its lovely to know someone is interested :)

[Adam Whitworth]

You are keen to try; that is an extremely positve fact. I suspect you would benefit greatly from attempting a few different stances in your writing, even if the results are at first disappointing.

[Violet Stone]

Personally I enjoyed this writing and felt the very frustration....One suggestion and it is only that a suggestion... In this line : Is there someones body I can borrow? (you might think about replacing the (someones to the word another) just a thought)
Very nice job though... I hope to read more from you.

[Violet Stone]

Thank you for your review and your suggestion, I think that's an excellent idea! Before I published this, I asked my friend what they thought and they weren't sure about that part either. I was trying to think of a way to improve it but my mind had gone blank. I believe your suggestion has fixed my problem! Thank you very much!

you are most welcome...