Hidden Ways

A quicker piece I put together, didn't spend too much time on this one.

Do not be easily fooled
By who I appear to be
It's only a mask as I play by your rules
Its all I allow you to see

 

Behind the eyes and beneath the smile
Is a girl whose so lost, been wandering awhile
And below the surface, hidden deep within
Lives a darkness of evil, secrets, and sins.

A handful of pills to help ease the day
A hope that starvation will show her the way
A comfort in blades, stashed away in a tin
A girl down on her knees, just begging to be thin

The demons that haunt her, she hides oh so well
Alone on this road, one that leads through the heart of hell
Praying for the day when she'll be released from this pain
Until then, in silence she suffers, her life slowly being drained

Author's Note

May revise later.

Reviews

[Fae]

Third stanza is extremely powerful. Good job.

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thank you so much :)

[Cole Hayley]

The 3r'd stanza is my favorite. But altogheter a very well written peice.

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thank you!

[Ezekiel Silver]

A very emotional poem. I love the vivid mood and imagery you put in it. Great work!

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thank you so much :)

[Allycat]

I agree with Kelsey, I never get tired of reading your writing..it always is expressed wonderfully, I love this..its a striking piece. Excellent work!

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Aww thank you so much! Those are the types of things that are so good to hear :)

[afra]

i love it ...i can feel the pain ...its so powerful ...well done

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thank you!

[Brielle Cartny]

This is also very sad! I know many people who constantly try to do this to themselves, but i make sure it stops.

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Yeah, most of my writings tend to have a darker tone or sadness to them. I guess that's what happens when you write out of personal struggles. But none the less, thank you for the review!

[Kelsey]

This is amazing; truly amazing. I never tire of your writing, it's so powerful and relatable. Wonderful job, as always. You have a gift.

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Aw, thank you so much! It means a lot to hear such wonderful words. :)

[Bumble]

Oh my word....this poem is brilliantly dark and beautiful.
"Behind the eyes and beneath the smile
Is a girl whose so lost, been wandering awhile
And below the surface, hidden deep within
Lives a darkness of evil, secrets, and sins."
^ This gave me chills. Really good job in capturing the essence!

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thank you so much!

[Ahmad Cox]

I could feel the pain and the honesty in this poem. I will be hoping and praying you find your inspiration and your light

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thank you :)