No More

Take this, my fragile heart

Beating erratically against my chest

Covered in blood and bruises

From all the times I've loved

"Love"

I shudder at such a cruel thing

Something so beautiful, so destructive

Should I carve the names of those responsible

Onto the wall of my heart's chamber?

Among those listed shall be my name

For I was foolish enough to hand you over

My heart, my vulnerable friend

No more shall people harm you

While you have nothing but good intent

Go now, my restless friend

Sleep until the pain is gone

Sleep until forever ends

For neither you nor I can love

No more

Reviews

[Shadows Ember]

I really like this. It shows that while love is beautiful, it is also one of the most destructive things a person can do. The formatting is really easy and simple. My only suggestion is how each line is capitalized. It really distracts the reader but other than that it is very well-written.

[SheenLeigh]

I am afraid to give a comment saying this is good because you note it. But anyway . I'll say that this a perfect poem, no aspects to be changed.

[Ian Faraway]

What do you mean 'note it'. As in I know it's good or I'll be mad for you saying it's good?

[SheenLeigh]

NO, it's good. I meant I am afraid because you say in your profile not to say anthing if it isn't a critique. :D