How Many Times...

How Many Times...

A Poem by Ian Faraway
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A little love poem

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How many times have I said

Goodbye to you

For the one reason

That you’re bad for my health

 

But I always come back for more

When I know the torturous truth

That you’re as broken as I am

It’s why we can’t be

 

It’s not just the age

Now that I’m not your type

It’s the way we are

I sit quietly while you party hard

 

How many times have I left

Then come back

Irresistible to your charm

And broken promises

 

My heart is open

Even though it's swollen from bruises

From all the times you pierced it

With harsh words and rejection

 

How many times will we play

The game of Hide and Seek

You hide your heart

While I try to seek it

 

At one point in time

I would’ve smiled at the game

While I slowly died inside

But now you got me showing my all

 

Maybe someday

I can feel your tender lips

Be warmed by your love

And for once, be happy

© 2011 Ian Faraway


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yet another good write. so sad that the subject feels such disappointed love. heart breaking but unable to leave. good job(:

Posted 8 Years Ago


A very good poem with conflict. Interesting that the conflict wasn't resolved in the end. I liked how the diction of the last stanza contrasted so sharply with the other word choices that came before when describing the subject of the poem.

"I sit quietly while you party hard" I liked this line. Just because opposites attract, doesn't mean they should.

Overall I enjoyed reading this. I did question why you broke it all up into four line stanzas, however, when there seemed to be no reason behind it. I know, kind of a nitpicky thing, but I was always taught that almost eerything about qa poem has a reason and a meaning which emphasizes its overall theme. Breaking it up to put emphasis on specfic lines or even words can make a pem even stronger than it already is. But I liked this poem and I especially thought the ending was good. Left me wanting for more, which is always a good reaction to have. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Well done on this piece. I absolutely adored it. You write with style and emphesis. I enjoyed reading. Great job.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


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I'm not sure what you meant by the first line " How many times how I said " if you meant (have) instead of (how)... and (Tho) = (Thought), P.s forgive me if I'm mistaken with the corrections, the poem was excellent, it speaks to the heart.. expresses the addiction that we cannot runaway from even if it hurts us too badly, very realistic and nicely written, well done

Posted 8 Years Ago



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