Its to late

Its to late

A Poem by Wannabewriter16
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Its about when I realized that I was losing the one person i thought i loved

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With my face streaked with tears...I slowly look up into your eyes...to find them looking at someone else...I try to reach out to you...but its to late...you are walking away...I try to call your name...but...the words...are stuck in my throat...my chest aches as I watch you go...my heart slowly breaking into two...I feel nothing but...searing...pain...it shoots through me...as I realize my one true love...is...gone...forever...

© 2015 Wannabewriter16


Author's Note

Wannabewriter16
I'm not very good at spelling

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wow. your form is hard to read but over all its good

Posted 2 Years Ago


Wannabewriter16

1 Year Ago

Thank you I have more also. This was 2 yrs ago when i started. I belive my new ones are better now. .. read more
Feelings are raw. A beautiful poem indeed. And if you work out on the structure of the poem, it will seem more presentable to the reader and will enhance its quality further. Thanks for sharing :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Spelling is mostly attention to detail AND experience at writing... you'll get better. The emotional impact of this piece was well presented and readily understood. "Too" has meaning; part of writing and expressing your thoughts means making and understanding word choices. Many "flaws" are readily understood if you read your work aloud (for real now) AND do it slowly - ensuring you read the words AS THEY ARE WRITTEN and not as you wish they were.

Take care,
Chris

Posted 4 Years Ago


Chris

4 Years Ago

Bonnie, it isn't about our flaws - we ALL have them... its about our own willingness to grow our sel.. read more
Wannabewriter16

4 Years Ago

I have a major willingness to grow myself into more than what I was.
Wannabewriter16

4 Years Ago

thanks for reading!!!
Very emotional piece, it was a nice read for me, thank you for sharing.

Insight.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Wannabewriter16

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much,it means a lot .
I can really feel the emotion behind this.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Wannabewriter16

4 Years Ago

I'm glad you can feel the emotion behind this,it means a lot.
you are very good at expressing your feelings I like the way you have put spaces between some of the words like the way we do when we are crying well done

Posted 4 Years Ago


Wannabewriter16

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much. It may be very little words,but they truly show how I felt at the time. I was act.. read more

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Added on September 16, 2015
Last Updated on September 16, 2015
Tags: love, tears, hurt, pain

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Hello my name is Bonnie and I'm 18 years old and I love to write. more..

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