Why Can't I Say?

Why Can't I Say?

A Poem by Watch Me Scream
"

Why can't I say it?

"

A phrase to say

Or maybe to shout

I dont quite know

How to go about

Saying such simple

Words to you

When my heart beats fast

Because it's true

I lose my breath

I cannot think

All I can feel

In every blink

Of your lid,

Hiding your eyes

But I see through

Their pale disguise

I've always been horrid

At feeling what I say

Or is it saying what I feel?
Is feeling okay?

See, I've been alone

I've been so numb

You've shocked my senses

My brain's gone dumb

It's just not used

To someone like you

Peering into me

Brown gaze into blue

Green and yellow

I can feel bursting

Though gray hovers near:

For coldness it's thirsting.
I think I've lost it

Finally gone insane

I'm personifying colors

Giving them pain

For f**k's sake

Why can't I say it?

Speak what I mean!

Not just spray it

Onto concrete

And into doors

Carve into walls

And onto the floors

Thats how strongly

How powerfully I fear

But I am so strong

When you are near

My dear, it's too soon

For me to say-

But it can't be too soon

If I feel this way!
I'm just afraid

You'll be like the rest

Take me for granted

While I feel blessed

But in my heart,

I know this fear's for naught

You've cheated before me...
And been caught

You've learned that lesson
I know for a fact

And now you've gained

what before you lacked

I feel it in my bones

I know it's true....

So why can't I say

"I love you"?

© 2012 Watch Me Scream


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good flow and rhythm, good expressions as well.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Cute.
Sense of protection.
Definite rhythm.



Posted 7 Years Ago


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SJ
Now that's poetry in motion! Absolutely amazing, I love how there's this flow and rhythm to your poem, the way you express yourself with your words just adds and amplifies the rhythm of the poem. Brilliant work, looking forward to reading more of your fantabulous creations!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Beautiful! just beautiful! The flow of words and the passion that is in this....you are a great poet! Please keep writing!
100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


I have a little issue with the length of the poem, the poem is overloaded with few lines. Though it is expressed wonderfully in its own way, very freely and very openly. I like the fact that you have managed your thoughts in the poem very deliberately. The read was good, you did good. But CAN DO BETTER, because you certainly have the potential reflecting in your way of expressions.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I've felt this often myself.. I'm afraid what my spoken words will bring out in another. Powerful, and full of truth. Totally relatable, and awesome words. Thanks or sharing!! =)

Posted 7 Years Ago


ahhh mazzziiinnnngggg love it so much. you have a control over words and an emotional capacity and a passion that i can only wish to someday posess.... i loved it.

A.L.

Posted 7 Years Ago


As Mark says the rhythm and fow of this poem is very smooth The theme is universial and you will run across many of similar themes. Which is not a bad thing.
Why? Because all that can be said has been said and will be repeated over again when we are but a dusty memory.
It is the job, nay it is the obligation of poets now and in the future to say these things, express them. in a new or diffrent way. and with this piece you have done a good job of accomplishing that goal.
However, I do have one nit. That four letter word the one that begins with the letter "f" in line 36 is uncessary. The English language is rich with words that will express what you want to say without having to resort to such common vulgarties.
Just one of my many picidilleos. I hope you will take this in the kindly sperit in whch it is meant. Oh bye the by I do not as a rule give poems a grade

Posted 7 Years Ago


I love the rhythm in this write. Also, very original in how you present feelings for someone who may or may not have the same feelings. I hope you keep writing, you are talented. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Watch Me Scream

7 Years Ago

Thank you, that's so kind :)
Wow, so powerful, Love the emotions in this. So well written

Posted 7 Years Ago



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