mother

mother

A Poem by Water_the_Sun

The voice in my heart is tongue tied
My minds lips slip, trip, studder over
Half formed phrases that fall flat
Cracking like egg shells, broken, emptied
Sizzling in a pan of self doubt and confusion
Fried and salted and gobbled up by ravenous frustration

 

I knew what I wanted to say to you once
But it slipped through my fingers when you transformed
From mother into murderer of innocence and hope
And I could see you only as a serpent
Wrapped tight around my soul but I
Grew around you, like oak around barbed wire
Slowly choking out the memory of your
Form, withered, scales, skin, skeleton, fossilized
Within folds of dark organic flesh
Captured between these lines, you are a prisoner in your own mind
But its me who is caged and I
Drink this ink like the poison that you carry in that sharp smile you flash at me
And that false tear you shed and that song of forgiveness you sing
Praising "God" for absolving you
Of a sin you refuse to own up to being guilty of in the first place
And  I know that the only antidote is to write to you
But the words bleed into tears, anger, dissbelief,
An almost-hatred and it

 

Rends my heart tongue tied
My minds lips slip, trip, studder over
Half formed phrases that fall flat
Cracking like egg shells, broken, emptied
Sizzling in a pan of self doubt and confusion
Fried and salted and devoured by ravenous frustration

© 2009 Water_the_Sun


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Hi. I'm not sure if you are new or not..but regardless this piece is incredible. It flows the way a piece of gripping almost angry piece should. I take it that you and your Mom are/were not very close at one point in your life...or was this piece more abstract than I first believed. I'll have to re-read. In any case. Remarkable writing. Really.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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I wish I could conceive the words to tell you how great this poem is, but I simply don't have that ability. All I can say is this work of art is AMAZING! I love it!

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is an incredible piece. The emotion is clearly evident and beautifully worded.

Posted 13 Years Ago


wow

wow

that was amazing, and having parental troubles, it really hit close to home

Posted 13 Years Ago


Well done, the twist was unexpected due to the name of the poem. Word choice and the imagery with the tree is just great. There is quiet a lot in this poem to be found, but I'm sure you know and the rest will also when they read, so I won't bother with it here :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Your word choice is so lovely. The way youre stringing together such strong emotion and the way you choose to describe it had be completely tied to this piece to the very end.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It's very nice. I especially liked the tree imagery from the second stanza.

Posted 14 Years Ago


A powrful piece of writing.Emotion flowing strongly I think we all feel that way at some time with or without justification.
You express your thoughts in impeccable free form poetic prose and engender a reaction in your readers

Posted 14 Years Ago


The first stanza and the last in this poem was the focus for me in this writing i don't think i will ever eat another fry up again without thinking of your powerful metaphor,this poem ebbed and flowed beautifully and was written by the mind of a lady who has suffered from the demise of a personal trauma.
Perhaps mother -daughter relationship might have hit the rocks and there isn't much worth salvaging.
There is always something either unique or frustrating about the relationship between a daughter and her mum,my sister always had big arguments with my mum and i could never understand why they were like chalk and cheese but perhaps it is because there were petty jealousies or maybe the lack of maternal instinct prevented the bond from being strong.
Your poem really reflected on an interesting theme and asked more questions than it provided answers.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Most people can relate to this. I know I can. I made a poem to my mom. I really like this piece. The anger is really well portrayed.

Posted 14 Years Ago


This was really deep
Mother have a way to hurt us
or build us

I can defintely relate

Great job!

Orlando M

Posted 14 Years Ago



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