An Apology To Future Lovers

June 7, 2011

We are strangers now,
He and I,
But there was a time, not
Too long ago,
He was mine.

Sweaty palms, sweet nothings,
Lyrics whispered in my naive ear,
Poisonous causes of love.
I do not require these things
From you.

Your eyes,
Your body,
Moving over me,
Will be his
As you help me remember.

Author's Note

The first poem I have written in years! What do you think? Constructive criticism is welcomed and appreciated! :)

Reviews

[ImagineItAll]

I re-read this poem, and it was even better the second time reading it. The first two stanzas are extremely powerful by being so simple and still exploding with admiration. The last stanza, and I could be reading into it too much, reflects how your next relationship will be. The man you are looking at today is making you feel similar to how you have felt before, and you cannot help but remember your past.

Great title, by the way. That was what first sucked me in to begin with. :-)

[Cyrano]

The possibility of one of my future lovers addressing this to me deeply perturbs my ego as a male... And that's what makes this piece so awesome!

[Enigma]

Pretty good for the first attempt at poetry after a long time. :)
I like how the description covers the past where he meant everything and now that he has parted ways, the memories are difficult to let go. Great write.

[LeaflessTree]

Wow! Even if this was years ago since you haven't written a new poem, I love this! You have a talent, just haven't had time to set it back in yet! ;)

[November Gold]

The message conveyed was very strong; emotion packed with each line