Vanished

Vanished

A Poem by мalғy

Vanished out of sight, out of mind
Yet your still here
Filling up space
Yet I can't see you
I can't touch you
You went so suddenly
I miss you
Vanished
Gone
So far gone
How you never said goodbye
You never even let me see you one last time
Why did you let go so quickly
Don't you know that it will destroy me
The way you vanish
The way you left with no cares
Yet I care
I am still here
All alone

© 2014 мalғy


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I feel there's a rhythm in this that's drowning somehow. The words are good, the imagery speaks.. maybe less sharp breaks between the lines? This is a 70/100 in heart, so don't think you haven't created something good and beautiful. Those goodbyes you never get around to hear stay with you, don't they?

Posted 9 Years Ago


"Vanished out of sight, out of mind
Yet your still here"
People might vanish. But they never really go out of our minds. Their memories never fade because we try to hold on to them.

A good write. Keep writing :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


not bad.....................................................................

Posted 9 Years Ago


 мalғy

9 Years Ago

Woah...Why all those dots?
Don't you hate when people leave but they still haunt your mind with their unyielding presence. It is like, why won't they just leave you alone? Clearly they didn't want anything to do with you, so why must they plague your thoughts. Well done dear, this was thought provoking and a great read.

Posted 9 Years Ago


 мalғy

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much! I appreciate the kind words, and I must say I agree with you completely
Its a good poem. Maybe think about tense when you write. Such as "didn't you know it would destroy me". Just a suggestion. Great job though

Posted 9 Years Ago


 мalғy

9 Years Ago

Thank you, and I seem to get confused when it comes to that sometimes
Mari K

9 Years Ago

Me too. Luckily I had an english professor that beat me in the head with it. lol Great job though
 мalғy

9 Years Ago

That is a good teacher than!!

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Added on August 7, 2014
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