Something so simple

I enjoyed doing this piece, not just due to from where the inspiration has came, but also how it also can be related to other things outside of fiction. Enjoy!

Something so simple

something so natural

 

How could it turn so difficult?

Why did it have to happen?

 

Why?

Why!

 

Why is it like this?

What have we done to deserve this?

 

Something so simple

yet difficult.

Reviews

[Gheeneil]

Some simple things are more complicated because people do complicate simple things at times. Ironic but true. By the way, "had' in the 4th line must be changed to "have". Just one grammatical error. Interesting piece! :)

[Vito XYZ]

I really like the pure and basic style used, basic as in not a lot of Metaphors I'm starting to feel maybe they aren't needed for a good piece of writing,

The impression it gives me is maybe a Juliet and Romeo feel, but with them both knowing something simple like they can't be together, but haven falling in Love despite this, nothing wrong with falling in love with another person it natural for a girl and boy but hell breaks loose "How could it turn so difficult?" being apart each of them being criticised "What have we done to deserve this?" the tears that come before resolution, but then each of them taking a step forward and just re accounting what it was that was happening/happened "No matter what the tears won't stop. No matter what we have to fulfil our roles" and the memory left behind as time passes "Something so simple yet difficult" I get that type of feeling from it. Good stuff mate

[Daniel Gardner]

I like the poem. One of the complex ones on this site. Or maybe its simple but such a deep writing it seems complex. Either way it is very good. Only thing I caught was "Why had it to happen?" Did you mean "Why did it have to happen?"

[A.Lee]

Hmm... This is a very interesting piece. I really like the fact that it can be applied to pretty much anyone and any situation. I like the despair and frustration that can be felt through the many questions. Very well written.

[praying for help]

i like this piece. interesting. i am wondering about your contention that "we have to fulfill our roles." are we fulfilling a role if there is no real choice in the matter? it seems to me that destiny requires a choosing. a poet (i'm blanking on the name) once said that we can do what we want, but we can't want what we want. i think he meant that we are who we are, yes, but what we do is the life we choose for ourselves...


...just pondering the word choice...