Inside

just something I whipped up during class.

Plain words frame my soul...
Pain...standing still under the rain...
Though I can't say it all...
There's more inside...more pain...

Author's Note

It's too short, I know...yea what else? lol

Reviews

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I like standing at the rain but I guess for a deffirent reason than yours
Love your piece
Peace!

[Mauricio Montoya]

great start I'd add more. Nice work.

[José Humilde]

I like the concept. After reading it a few times, I really felt like hearing what else was in your soul.

Why can't you "say it all?"

I was thinking that you could definitely build on this poem. How about using some of these other plain words that frame your soul?

I definitely would like to see you develop something more with this concept in mind!

Just a suggestion!

Great piece, thanks!

-JH