Purezento [A Present]

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Purezento

 

 

Do you have a clue what it feels like

To be given a fancy case

by a man with no face

 

a low flutter of tiny wings of silk

and a muffled welcoming giggle

 

To stare at it's sealed content

For so long...

The distance between

the ribbons of green

and your shaking hand

shrinks...

and expands...

 

Do you know what it feels like

to retreat quietly choosing

to stay hesitant

choosing not to choose yet

until the giggle inside the case

is muted...and it vibrates.

pleading voices spruce in place

 

and then a nudge or two...

 

Do you know what it feels like

to stand by the doorway

and watch the case

imitate all the other

non-living tools

in their silence

 

A Waste...

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Image by: PinkFireFly

http://browse.deviantart.com/?qh=§ion=&q=present+box#/d2bodba

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

The words have their place as they blend in the season of giving, thank you for sharing.

[RIO]

Very interesting...loved your choice of words,
Really creative=)
Great Job!
x

[Erin]

Wow. For the first thing I've ever read of yours, this is really good. Anaphora is excellent. Word choice and rhyming pattern is wonderful. It's really sad in its own special way. Great, great job.
PBP

[Havatara]

I liked it. It seemed like you put a lot of thought into it, like you do most of your poems, I think, if not all. I especially liked:
a low flutter of tiny wings of silk
and a muffled welcoming giggle
Great job, as always, and keep writing!

I like this! :) It made me smile! :D

[Dante Balsote]

The feeling is wasted. :D

[momo]

sounds like you got a crappy gift from someone...lol very nice!

[Geralyn Miller]

I love it! Another "onion" poem, with layer inside layer, inside layer of meaning. This is a poem to set the reader thinking. Good Work!

[Marie Harrison]

Cool poem. An enigma or a riddle of sorts. I loved it! Very creative!

[AreWeBothCrazy]

I love the rhyme "Your shaking hand / shrinks... / and expands... :) This just got me for some reason :) You did a great job expressing emotion in this poem. Well done, I look forward to reading more :)