Seeing Is Believing

If seeing is believing, and believing is seeing then

what is this dreaming? What is this particular state of being?

The unconventional state of being one experiences

daily when their seeing and believing and their mental feelings

surpass their very physical actions of believing, those of which

morph into a state of truly being for a small time, to give a small feeling

for a unmatched contemporary moment

of agreeing to what the eyes are deceiving

and the mind is perceiving nothing but subconscious dreaming

initiated during their momentary state of believing in the decreeing

intensified feeling, as one searched for a deeper meaning for

being.

The mirror however, lies completely. If seeing is believing

why does a mirror force the brain to perceive the opposite of

what is believed to be the right direction, the right formation

of being. The meaning for this flipped physical being is to better

enhance that particular state of dreaming into something more

irrational and subsequent, further testing what can really be,

and what really can not be for the brain to actually be what it

must be, to deceive the perceived, specifically for the task of

showing the greater meaning in the feeling of believing…

Seeing isn’t believing if what you are perceiving through this action of

being only signifies a false state of being;

the entire meaning of this moment of being is wrong then.

Why would you want to see what you believe in? What if

what you perceive your prior belief to be was wrong?

Do you honestly think about what could be? What

could possibly be? What can not be? What is, what is not?

What is being? If seeing is believing, what are dreams? Are we

not entitled to believe what is only so deceiving in our natural state

of dreaming? Dreaming apparently is falsely descriptive feelings

angled and morphed into a state of metaphysical being,

sometimes only showing a deeper meaning of what individual

believing is… How can you believe if you can not see?

Do you see the meaning of believe if seeing and perceiving

the world of dreaming are unable to be achieved when you can’t

actually see your own state of being? What’s the point of being

if you can’t see what it is you’ve been lead to believe?

Is it really believing at all? What’s the meaning behind believing…”

What’s the meaning behind dreaming? Dreaming… dreaming about

your own individual moment of mentally perceiving. If seeing is believing,

the what’s the point of dreaming?

Author's Note

I honestly lost my self towards the end of this one, because I could do more to it but I felt as though it would end up too long in the end.. I'll revise it within the next few days because it still feels a bit choppy to me.

Either way, enjoy.

Reviews

[justjenn_2u]

headache. Not that I can't go deep but this is repetitive and needs to be broke down just a bit. It's very choppy and not a poem.

[Enigma]

Well it is a poem actually, just a very unique one. The repeating lines is supposed to help get my point across without completely giving the reader a headache; but I'm not sure if I want it to be more clear or more confusing as well. It does need a lot of work and I'm certainly not done with it, but then again, I'm only 15. I'm not perfect.

Thank you for your feedback however, I appreciate it(:

[justjenn_2u]

I am only trying to help. Message me and let me help on format.

[TheSweet]

This is both good and interesting and I can see the kind of thing you were going for, in a similar way to what I was going for in my most recent poem. What I would recommend if you want to revise it any more is to think about whether you want it to confuse or be succinct. I think in the first half particularly you seemed to shrug a bit of clarity for an extra rhyme here and there - which is fine as it still makes sense with more concentration, but you need to make sure you're consistent with it. Also, making it more succinct might enable to you cut a little bit to add more on the end if you need to, so it's just something to think about. :)

It's not an easy kind of poem to write, by any means, and I think you pretty much nailed it, so hats off.

[Enigma]

I understand what you mean. I need to get my message across a bit more clearly without completely turning it into a mesh of nothingness. Some portions don't make sense, but it does indeed help with the flow a little bit. I was actually trying to go off of your poem, because I'd never tried something like this before and you inspired me to try. So thank you for your feedback! I really appreciate it(:

[TheSweet]

I inspired you? Well I'm honoured - thank you! Keep up the good work :)

[James Hades]

This was a great read! There is a somewhat lyrical and tongue twister like aspect in the internal rhyming "-ing" you constantly use and i think it's used very well, in the sense that you portray the paradoxical atmosphere and psychotic but calm notion of dreaming and the questioning of reality and our daily lives in which we dream off to alot. This is a great piece of writing and personally, i think that you should leave it the way it is, of course you might change some things but i think that as a whole, it is a coherent piece of writing that evokes to the reader the true notion of dreaming. I must say that your consistency with the -ing rhyming was very thorough and well done, it could have gotten boring after a couple lines but somehow it didn't, very good writing :) keep it going :D

Oh i also forgot to mention your mentionning of mirrors, i totally agree and think we hold the same thoughts on mirrors and their false representation of reality! :)

[Enigma]

Thank you! I really appreciate that!(: