Picture Perfect

Picture perfect

Don't paint our love so grey
That's not the image I want you to portray

Paint with pastels
The color is what the picture will tell

Blur the fissures between us
Enshroud the perception of distrust

Paint the art of peace
Depict deceiving beliefs

Frame our bodies thinner
Paint less of our inner

Create us picture perfect
What I am to you will make us forget

That's perfect

Your perfect

Everyone will see the picture perfect you and me
but nothing that lies beneath

Author's Note

Comments and critique are valued. Thank you for reading

Reviews

[soliloquy]

So very sweet....

[Nina Burke]

Thanks Soliloquy

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your starting was awesome...........



Picture perfect

Don't paint our love so grey
That's not the image I want you to portray

Paint with pastels
The color is what the picture will tell
well write..............you should have to continue it..........

[Nina Burke]

Thank you very much!

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mine too to share with me, nina bonita

[Sami Khalil]

A sweet enjoyabe re. Well penned.

[Nina Burke]

Thank you Sami

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Eileenws]

The picture should only tell the story that you want conveyed, no more, no less. That is the theme I am getting from this poem. On the 2nd last line, shouldn't it be "you're perfect." Nicely done.

[Nina Burke]

Thank you, I'll edit it :)

[Holly Mason]

that's perfect
your perfect
like the way the words are spaced like a pause is in the air then whoosh go again
well written
thank you for sharing*)

[Nina Burke]

Thank you

[Irfan Bashir Shah]

A nice an pleasant poem....
The flow was perfect....
"The color is what the picture will intel"
Instead of intel you should use tell...
But that's just a mere suggestion...
It's really a nice poem...
I wish you had extended it a lil.....
But then sometimes it's better to let it be...
Thanks for sharing!

[Nina Burke]

I like your suggestions. Ill edit "intel" now and perhaps later ill paint a bigger picture ;) Thank you for reading and the suggestions Irfan!!

[Mehak Mushtaq]

This is a really good poem. 700 views and 1 review is so unfair.

[Nina Burke]

Thank you so much Mehak, Sometimes onlookers are unable to review but as long as I have enabled a special meaning in their minds then my work is done!

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Anytime. You're right.

[khalid]

very nice picture shaped as a poem. i love the perfection of the picture here. that is what we all look forward to, having perfect appearance and feelings. sometimes we may hope we reform ourselves as we love to look like. we love to control our life to take it wherever we want. we love to look perfect in the eyes of our beholders. we love to have perfect love. for me, this is a perfect poem..

[Nina Burke]

For me, this is a perfect comment! Thank you for reading Khalid

[khalid]

you are welcome..my pleasure really..