Thank You

Thank You

A Poem by Will
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To everyone who's served that deserves this thank you.

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First, the one who fought in World War II,
When these horrible weapons were brand new.
You fought hard, nearly died,
When your friends fell, you refused to cry.

The one who fought in Korea, now,
When MacArthur went for China, you took your last bow.
All your hard work had gone to s**t,
But you swallowed your pride and took the hit.

To the one in Vietnam we go,
Charlie aint getting me; hell no!
But Charlie caught up, and our boys came on home;
Treated like s**t, we couldn't even throw ''em a bone.

Now to the Gulf, we find another,
Fighting side by side with his brothers.
Tyrants and liars stand no more,
No longer people treated like w****s.

Then the one fought against terror,
"Mission accomplished"? That's an error.
We lost too many, fought our way out,
But 2,997 avenged; of that, there is no doubt.

So to all those who served,
With the steeliest of nerves,
And to all those who never came home to their loving crew,
I have to extend a great big thank you.

© 2013 Will


Author's Note

Will
I tried to be historically accurate,if anyone has any questions/ or concerns, feel free to air them, I'm all for constructive criticism. Again, to all of those who've served, thank you.

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The way the Nam vets were treated by their fellow "Americans" was despicable. That started in 1969/70 and it had a lot to do with unrestricted news media coverage. War is a f*****g ugly business and civilians can't take the exposure for long before they lash out at some one. That's why Desert storm looked like a video game with a curious lack of mangled corpses until the so called "highway of death" coverage. That was when the Iraqis were retreating down the only highway out of Kuwait and coalition air power were ripping their defenseless columns to pieces. The UN cried foul, the US claimed legit military targets, the news crews kept showing burned and mangled bodies and President Bush said "We're done." So disturbing media coverage influenced Desert Storm as well as Vietnam. The big scandal for the Iraqi occupation was Abu Ghraib prison and the mistreatment of detainees. My division had been in the Anbar province for months when the story broke and we were so pissed off at the Iraqis we were like "yeah, so what's your f*****g point." I get what the point is now but at the time I couldn't have cared less. The Abu Ghraib scandal was just one of the many f**k ups in a long chain of f**k ups that all but guaranteed the insurgency that rose up against us, but I digress. Great poem Will and thank you

Posted 10 Years Ago


Will

10 Years Ago

The fact that people can blame soldiers for going out to defend the homeland and then treating them .. read more
Not bad. I think the tone is nicely done and it's appropriate for the theme, but I think you could have used more evocative imagery here and there. As it stands, this is a fairly good tribute, but it feels a little too narrative for my tastes.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Will

10 Years Ago

I understand the point you make about the imagery, but I felt like if I went too imagery heavy, I'd .. read more
I'm no patriot, and though I have respect for the fallen, it is not something I dwell upon. Truthfully, I hold no heroes on a pedestal - I wish I died for it gives us all something to be appreciative of, and acknowledge our life as a gift. This is written delightfully and I commend you on your gratification for the bravery of others. You write confidently, keep it up :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Will

10 Years Ago

Sometimes I dwell, but I like to call it philosophical pondering. Life is truly a gift, and we must .. read more
Wow, this was such a lovely tribute! :) It was beautifully written and well said!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Will

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Sye :)
"Thank You " For writing this amazing piece :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Will

10 Years Ago

You're very welcome, and thank you for reading and reviewing, I appreciate it.
This is such a nice piece. A great tribute to the soldiers who sacrificed their lives in the wars. Wars which could have well been stopped. A moving piece :-)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Will

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. It means a lot.
Shivam Murari

10 Years Ago

:-)
This is a good tribute to our veterans, Will. So many wars, so much bravery, so much heartache. I'm not sure about the "we all had a cow" line. It seems to take away from the seriousness of the piece. Also, check your typo - you have "we couldn't even throw 'me a bone" - should be " 'em "

Overall, I like this a lot, and your history looks good.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Will

10 Years Ago

I'm glad you appreciated this piece, Rita. I changed that "we had a cow" to "you took your last bow... read more
Rita L. Sev

10 Years Ago

Just reread - yes, that "took your last bow" works much better.

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