Love is Merely a Dream

I fall too hard too fast,
it's a really nasty habit.
I see a chance to fall in love
and I can't help but grab it.

By now I should've learned
that it never ends well.
Being alone and unloved
will forever be my hell.

Every time I've ever loved
it's quickly gone to shambles.
I've taken my fair share of chances,
but with your heart you shouldn't gamble.

So I guess until the end
it'll be just me and my words..
I guess it just wasn't meant to be,
so for me, love is a dream deferred.

Author's Note

A nod to one of my favorite poems of all time

Reviews

[Careline]

Alone and unloved, my a*s.... You know just as well as I do both of those things aren't true... :)

[Will]

I'm a poet, I have to write about something!

[Mary Christabel George]

It was more of a communication of yours with your readers in the form of a poem.
"By now I should've learned
that it never ends well.
Being alone and unloved
will forever be my hell."

Is a good stanza..

[Will]

Thank you, Mary. Always appreciated

[Mary Christabel George]

Welcome :)

[Lou ._.]

Deep, and poignant. {Had to use the theosaurus so I could sound a little more educated. Increasing one's vocabulary.}
I think love is one of those impossiably hard topics. Because alot of the time it's sadness or happiness. Kinda like a trainwreck of bipolar-fluxual-feelings that will ultimately end in some way or another. Also, today's standards of love are quite depressing. *sigh*

{Ignore the spelling errors.}

Other than that, it's a beautiful peice of poetry.

[Will]

"a trainwreck of bipolar-fluxual-feelings that will ultimately end in some way or another"
read more"a trainwreck of bipolar-fluxual-feelings that will ultimately end in some way or another"

The best description of love I've ever heard. Thanks a lot, Lou :)

[Lou ._.]

mmm, I meant love also in general. "All good things end." A sad thing, but true.

[Cerulean]

Awww.... I love the bittersweet theme to it, and how the simplicity of it gives it a more in-depth fill. Very good description in the stanzas. And that is why, I stick to falling in love with food lol :) :) :)

*Nods to your favourite poems of all time* I can see why it's one of your faves :) :) :)

[Will]

Food is one of the safest loves (I say as I gnosh on chocolate covered pretzels :3). Thank you, cerulean.

[Cerulean]

Yes I agree (I say as I glare at you) Not fair, I want those pretzels! Gimme the pretzels and I won't resort to shooting you with vegetables.... yes, vegetables: most peoples' worst nightmare :D :D

You can just call me Ceru or Lea for short :) :)

[Will]

Alright you got em ;) lol.

[Cerulean]

Is it a trick? 'Cos I am not gonna throw out an empty bag ;)

[Master K-tops]

Good write. I like the flow. Thumbs up.

[Will]

Thank you very much

[richom]

I'm sure you don't want advice or platitudes from a stuffy old codger, but age 15 is too early to give up on anything you seek. Your poem is written with skill and maturity of one far older than you. Excellent meter and rhyme (although purists would question the S's on shambles and words but not on their rhyming words). "Habit" and "grab it" is especially clever. This poem is an example of what I meant when I replied to your review that it is astonishing to read such thoughtful and artfully-constructed poetry by one your age. (I suppose you know how to access your poem to correct the typo on the last line. If not, please message me and I'll explain.)

[Will]

I deeply appreciate such kind words. I really do. I don't intend on giving up yet, and I think I can think venting through my poetry for that. Yes, I'll fix up that typo right now. I usually miss them when I write because its late at night and I'm horribly tired. So thank you once again, and I'll go clean it up now.

[Rita L. Sev]

Don't ever give up on love - it only takes one to be The One! Great flow and rhyme overall - check that last stanza. Maybe tighten up a bit:

So I guess until the end
it'll be just me and my words..
I guess love just wasn't meant to be,
For me, a dream deferred.

[Will]

Giving up isn't really my style, so I won't. I like the idea of fixing up the last stanza, so I'll do it on my tablet after work. Thanks for reading and giving such a wonderful review, as you so often do.