Screams of Eight

Someone else's experience gave me the need to capture it in poem form

From what I knew it wasn’t going to be good,

I knew of the wreckage, and of the potential,

What I didn’t know,

Was the screams of eight,

Agonizing and pain filled screams,

Adding fuel to the flames,

Encouraging the flames to eat burning flesh,

The smell of death lingering in the air,

We were first on scene,

First to hear the screams of eight,

We were first on scene,

And we didn’t get the help we needed,

 

You gave them every possible thing,

To get over hearing those screaming children,

But you left us to go over and over,

The haunting scream following us in every way,  

We stood there unable to do a thing,

The flames had done their damage,

The kids had no hope,

And we, we were hopeless,  

From what I knew, they were only young,

Three kids dead at the age of eight,

Eaten alive by the flames,

Tortured only to torture others, 

This memory plagues my mind,

The cries and screams of three,

Screaming for someone to help,

Only to be answered with the silence of death,  

Now I am the one being tortured,

Silently screaming for help,

Pleading for someone to notice my cries,

Only to be answered with silence of fear,

 

To this day, I remember those screams,

I say it doesn’t affect me, not after this time,

But nothing can heal those wounds,

Nothing can remove those screams from my mind.

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Very powerful and deep write filled with emotion.
I like how you wrote about somone elses experience. You know your a great writer when you write such an amazing poem about someone else. This poem tells me that you really listen and understand others feelings and have the ability to see through there eyes.
I know i just said it but this really is an extreamly powerful poem.
I really loved reading this. Keep writing :)

[WillaDanvers]

Thank you! That means so much!!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Your welcome :)

[revalatia]

I like this poem because it allows for creative imagery....Everyone taken to their own scenario through the words of the writer. ..obscure, yet vivid.. terrifying yet solemn. I quite enjoy it..Another great read. Thank you!

[WillaDanvers]

Thank you!

[Makrix Mottle]

This poem honestly wasnt very good. It was just about someone not being able to help in a fire situation. Keep trying though!

[WillaDanvers]

is the subject the problem? the structure? words? any tips?

[Makrix Mottle]

I honestly dont know what the problem is, I just didnt like it. But hey, my poem isnt very good either!

[WillaDanvers]

We all have our preferences to poetry :) but thought i would ask to see what i did wrong :)

[Hebe]

You can never forget .....that's the feeling that comes over you, as your read this piece and the images you created with your words are visual! ...

[WillaDanvers]

Thank you for reading, and thank you for your review!! :)