Mine is Night

Came to me in a dream....

Mine is night

and yours is Day

but night gets bright

and day will fade

Then nothing is left

except forbidden dreams

and broken promises

trapped in the seams

so day will fade

and night will be bright

the world will be grey

and we'll have nothing to say

but if you want

I'll leave the night behind

and the darkness will fade

there will be nothing to haunt

nothing to find

ending the masquerade

...but only if that’s what you really want

Author's Note

Came to me in a dream...pretty strange acctually, anywho I knows its...odd but try not to dis it to much XD pleasant dreams.

Reviews

[Summer D.]

"But only if that's what you really want." I like the poem Star! It is actually a very pretty work of art. It came from a dream? I'm jealous. My dreams don't give me that much inspirations for poems...

Your phrasing was pretty fantastic. This almost seemed like a conversation between two people. Like a rapid exchange of raw and rough emotions... It wasn't incredibly elegant filled with the most fanciest of phrases but the message was there.

[hmm]

Written so poetically, i like what you wrote here.
Nice job!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The nature of us all is to, relax and forward meaning, well done, good read.