Crocodile tears

Crocodile tears

Nearly there, but there is she.

She looks at me, then he.    

Her tears like bullets to my skin,

while she is still protected,

by her scales, from within.  

No tear of mine could ever pierce that hide,

many a man has tried, then cried.

She will do the same to him, at least, that’s fair.

First he will care, then stare

at those crocodile tears she brings forth like rain

before realising that all has been in vain.                      

Reviews

[Alias]

I love the way you have used the saying 'crocodile tears' and taken it a step further to make her a crocodile, it's a great concept! The ending is also really good, gives a sense of resolution which is very satisfying. Overall, well thought out, the form is somewhat confusing, 2 then 3 then 4 then 2, I would suggest maybe adding some lines to even out the structure, the lines themselves are great so no harm in adding more! But don't touch that ending 'all has been in vain.' is very strong.
If you disagree no worries! It works well as it is just a thought :)
Really good, keep writing and adding more poems

[Willem Gray]

You are so kind thank you :) Yes the structure is a little, unstructured, I will try and give it some meaning. Typography is not my strong suit. In fact poetry is not my strong suit so you really are terribly kind in your review.

[Michael Oliver]

Like this one - you keep the imagery played with it - a way of discussing your inner world without recouse to cliche - well done