Needling

 

Making jokes

of little things,

a thimble on a counter,

a pin cushion pricked,

creating chuckles

on a thread

spun of someone’s poetry

Wound around a feeling,

stitched together with emotions,

created from a pattern of love

Sewn with sincerity

only so another

can laugh,

has ripped the fabric

of this that

was fashioned

Reviews

[Seriana]

Oooh, kind of a little sting felt here at the end. Feelings can be soft and sharp, and I am taking this to mean that sometimes they are stomped on by others and it interrupts the creation. Love all of your analogies.

[willweb]

Thanks so much again Seriana for you kind thoughts. Happy you enjoyed this.

[anne]

Wound around a feeling,
stitched together with emotions,
created from a pattern of love..
great job my friend...no one can ent the truth in these beautiful lines...:))

[TL Boehm]

ripped the fabric and pricked the skin as well. A fine poem with a sharp edge.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good of words and thoughts. You create things to ponder and digest in the words. The poem left me the want to know more. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[willweb]

Thank you my friend.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

I am needling this review together with some fabulous fabric of praise when completed will showcase the talents of this talented tailor of poetry....

[willweb]

Thank you Rico.

[dan]

Will, You did this with another of your pieces I reviewed. I like how you take the title and write lines containing synonyms of the title, flowing seamlessly (hey, I just did it too) I don't know if that is a particular variety of named poetry technique but I do know I like it. Great job. take care...dan

[willweb]

I don't know either...sometime I just write that way. Thanks so much Dan

[dan]

My pleasure, Will. Keep writing! take care...dan

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

I love the flow until I reach that last line---somehow "Fashioned"--seems like the wrong.
But, I love the rest of this--It is beautiful how use this illusion to "fashion" your poem.
Then, it reflects back on your title so well!
Amazing insights.

[willweb]

Thanks so much Josie. Yeah, I questioned that a bit too, but it seemed best at the time.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

I wasn't sure that was the right word, but the overall poem is well done!
You are welcome.

[R Smith]

great change of tack Will, yesterday i was reading your film noir poem and today your hitting the tendency to snipe at other and belittle their work and doing it in some style i might add, you get my vote.....well if there's something to vote in that is lol

[willweb]

Thanks so much Richard. No voting...the polls have closed. :)

[ANTO]

I misunderstood this first time round Will - sorry
This is beautiful metaphor - words are weaved by writers and they carry our feelings with them so for anyone to dierespect that is just plain rude. Many will see this and hopefully take heed and 'tread gently - for they tread on our dreams'
Thank you for all Will

[willweb]

Thanks so very much Anto for your return visit. I appreciate your kindness.