Softly

Softly

A Poem by DIVYA

If I was dusk you were a lambent day

In you I breathed the newness of a spring

As soot I was set to be blown away

To your sparkling shield I did yearn to cling

 

No frost could ever steal your lips their red

While I trembled as a wisp in the snow

Love would bloom in every garden you tread

Every blight and decay the wind would blow

 

What then did break my soul to splintered bits?

The sweet summer of us never did last

What scythe came upon tender hearts to slit? 

Dead embers interred with ashes of past


Your fervor was a fleeting bird I knew

Softly on wings of perfidy love flew

© 2022 DIVYA


Author's Note

DIVYA
My very first sonnet. Enjoyed doing it. Your feedback will be very appreciated always. :)

Thank you so much for reading.

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dearest DIVYA.. reminds me of when Anne Murray from Nova Scotia, Canada 🇨🇦 sings her endearing Song… “Little Snowbird” … perhaps you can find it on U-Tube. Your Sonnet will see me through the Winter Blues. tenderly, Pat

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

6 Hours Ago

Dear Pat,
Its one of the best things of today to read your words of such love and encourage.. read more
Patricia Wedel

6 Hours Ago

dearest DIVYA… it is lovely to aspire to be a “People Whisperer”. As poets we often touch upo.. read more
DIVYA

3 Hours Ago

Thank you so much Pat...Wishing you a day as beautiful as you.



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dearest DIVYA.. reminds me of when Anne Murray from Nova Scotia, Canada 🇨🇦 sings her endearing Song… “Little Snowbird” … perhaps you can find it on U-Tube. Your Sonnet will see me through the Winter Blues. tenderly, Pat

Posted 7 Hours Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

6 Hours Ago

Dear Pat,
Its one of the best things of today to read your words of such love and encourage.. read more
Patricia Wedel

6 Hours Ago

dearest DIVYA… it is lovely to aspire to be a “People Whisperer”. As poets we often touch upo.. read more
DIVYA

3 Hours Ago

Thank you so much Pat...Wishing you a day as beautiful as you.
I think you did a fantastic job with this and I love the contrasting viewpoints alternating throughout the piece. Really nice my friend.

Posted 2 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

2 Days Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating this effort, dear Willweb.
Beautifully worded with wonderful images. I loved several lines but especially the last. "Softly on wings of perfidy love flew"

Posted 3 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

3 Days Ago

Thank you so much Soren! I appreciate your visit.
Nice Shakespearean venture here, D. One might say love sometimes sucks, but I think the Bard would insist on a little more polish.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

3 Days Ago

Totally inspired by him so yes, some day shall sit with it and enjoy polishing it more. Thanks a lot.. read more
Dear Divya. This is poetry. I could feel every word.
"No frost could ever steal your lips their red
While I trembled as a wisp in the snow
Love would bloom in every garden you tread.
Every blight and decay the wind would blow".
The above lines. Had the feel of standing alone. Seeking. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

4 Days Ago

Dear friend, this is my first sonnet so your appreciation means the world to me. Thanks a lot for b.. read more
Coyote Poetry

3 Days Ago

You did well dear Divya. The poetry was wonderful and you are welcome.
I have never written in any forms, Divya, so I can't comment on the sonnet form itself, but as a piece of poetry, I found this a lovely, bittersweet read. So many romances begin and end this way with the initial fascination of a lover just fleeting until it peters out and just flies away on your wings of perfidy. You have created a poem full of beautiful lines and questions on a universal theme that most should understand. Fine work from your pen.❤

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

4 Days Ago

Thank you so much, my dear friend. I'm very very grateful for your encouraging reviews always. Wishi.. read more
An excellent first sonnet, DIVYA!

Hits all the rules of the form from where I read, and most importantly displays that much ignored rule of the Shakespearian sonnet that calls for a twist on the idea in the third verse, something most 'sonnet experts' conveniently overlook. It is an important part of the sonnet form that gets lost in translation amongst the flowery mush of most sonnets. So, it was great to read someone doing it correctly for a change.

A blossoming, secure love, beautifully portrayed in the first two verses gives way to realisation of loss and heartbreak in the third verse with the final two lines a bittersweet lamentation of all that came before. A wonderful effort by your pen, well written and described in a form that takes patience to master. You did extremely well. Kudos! 🌷

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

4 Days Ago

I have a great instructor and he is quite strict. :)
Thank you always, dear Doodley. You're j.. read more

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Added on November 23, 2022
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