One Moment

One Moment

A Poem by ❀ Gabriela ❀
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"There's silence, only silence. You don't even dare to breathe. You're counting on this moment. This one chance to succeed..."

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There's silence, only silence.
You don't even dare to breathe.
You're counting on this moment.
This one chance to succeed.

There's stillness, only stillness;
Save for your heart, ever- pounding.
The rapid, steady, heavy beats
Like trumpeters resounding.

This moment, this one moment
For all your life you've waited
Blood, sweat and tears 
Have turned to cheers
Success is hard work celebrated.








© 2012 ❀ Gabriela ❀


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Author's Note

 ❀ Gabriela ❀
I changed up the style of the third stanza. What do you think?

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I think it worked beautiful and i do so have to agree with you. Every success we have in life gives us this feeling and you have descibed it perfectly. I don't think there is a thing here that needs to be changed for it is just right. Thank oyu for a lovely read once again.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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it reads find to me....and I like the flow and progression of it. Well done.

Posted 2 Years Ago


This poem reminds me so much of my first ballet performance and how anxious I was because "I was counting on that moment. That one chance to succeed". I agree that you shouldnt change one thing about this poem. I think the short length combined with the anticipating words emphasises how moments like these may feel like forever at the time, when really they are as short and yet, as meaningful as this poem. Amazing write once again.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I think it worked beautiful and i do so have to agree with you. Every success we have in life gives us this feeling and you have descibed it perfectly. I don't think there is a thing here that needs to be changed for it is just right. Thank oyu for a lovely read once again.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Added on March 8, 2012
Last Updated on March 9, 2012
Tags: One, Important, Moment, Silence, Stillness, Suspence, Success

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 ❀ Gabriela ❀
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