My Heart Is Sore

My heart is sore

From your torture

It can't take anymore

So, please, give it a break.

 

The sin inside you

Is so great

Even the whole Sith Counsul

Isn't as evil as you.

 

Leave me alone

I dont love you anymore

Let me go home

And lock my door

So I will be protected

From your horrible game

Tearing my heart

In such a terrible way.

Author's Note

Hope you like it

Reviews

[XxxModifyTheMassesxxX]

so short but at the same time i found it amazing. i like how you summarized it into a compact poem that has a movement.

[Wild Willow Blue]

I did enjoy it. I got a big goofy grin on my face when I read "Sith Council". Nice wording, great flow, and prominent emotion. Nice work.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Great write. Lol sith council. Really can feel the emotions in the write. Nice.

[♥ Lexii Boo &hea..]

it is a lot of raw emotion and you can tell this is written from experience greatly written

[Kaya]

There is a clear show of emotion in this poem that makes it touching to read. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
Some punctuation could neaten it up a little bit, and maybe give the poem a bit more emphasis, But the concept is really well portrayed.

[Emma Berman]

The sin inside you, meaning you inside him?

Maybe he wouldn't mind too much. I have noticed you very much like the word "sin".